Hi I am looking for some help here this is my last paragraph i need to do for my writing workshop. It is a persuasive type paragraph and has to be 12 to 15 sentences in length. Please let me know how it is and if i have all the punctuations and such in place or if you have a better idea to throw into it. Thanks for your help it is very appreciated.
P.S. not trying to offend anyone with the topic here it's just a school project everyone is entitled to their own opinions.
Women Should not Choose Abortion
Because of the risks involved, women should not choose abortion to terminate their pregnancy. This is a life changing event with significant physical and emotional consequences of which most women do not realize until after the procedure has been performed. First of all, there are many immediate complications, which can occur during the procedure, the most common being perforation of the uterus, cervical injury, infection, and retained tissue. According to the American Journal of Obs/Gyn, since these injuries will usually go undiagnosed there is a 25% increased risk of problems with future pregnancies such as miscarriage, premature delivery, and rupture of the placenta to name a few. Secondly, the elevated risk of breast, cervical, and ovarian cancer. The Journal of National Cancer Institude reports that a womans risk of breast cancer increases by 30% after abortion, 90% if performed after 18 weeks of pregnancy and 150% if the woman is under age 18. Finally, and most importantly, is the emotional and psychological impact. Many woman after the abortion experience initial relief, the crisis is over and life returns to normal, however according to the Canadian Health and Canadian Medical Associations the crisis is not over, in fact it has just begun. Months even years later significant problems like clinical depression, drug and alcohol abuse, even suicide can occur due to the guilt, grief, and anger felt. Most women who have experienced abortion find it difficult to bond with a partner and other children afterwards, they say that they wish they had knowing all the facts before the procedure and regretted their decision to abort.
P.S. not trying to offend anyone with the topic here it's just a school project everyone is entitled to their own opinions.
Women Should not Choose Abortion
Because of the risks involved, women should not choose abortion to terminate their pregnancy. This is a life changing event with significant physical and emotional consequences of which most women do not realize until after the procedure has been performed. First of all, there are many immediate complications, which can occur during the procedure, the most common being perforation of the uterus, cervical injury, infection, and retained tissue. According to the American Journal of Obs/Gyn, since these injuries will usually go undiagnosed there is a 25% increased risk of problems with future pregnancies such as miscarriage, premature delivery, and rupture of the placenta to name a few. Secondly, the elevated risk of breast, cervical, and ovarian cancer. The Journal of National Cancer Institude reports that a womans risk of breast cancer increases by 30% after abortion, 90% if performed after 18 weeks of pregnancy and 150% if the woman is under age 18. Finally, and most importantly, is the emotional and psychological impact. Many woman after the abortion experience initial relief, the crisis is over and life returns to normal, however according to the Canadian Health and Canadian Medical Associations the crisis is not over, in fact it has just begun. Months even years later significant problems like clinical depression, drug and alcohol abuse, even suicide can occur due to the guilt, grief, and anger felt. Most women who have experienced abortion find it difficult to bond with a partner and other children afterwards, they say that they wish they had knowing all the facts before the procedure and regretted their decision to abort.
