IELTS Task 1 - Write a report for a university lecture describing the information shown in diagram

weather forecasting

This diagram display there are 4 stages to produce reliable forecast. First stage is collecting incoming information which is via satellite, radar and drifting buoy. These first-hand information need to be analysis and forecasting the future weather. As for that, Australia Bureau of Meteorology will study the satellite photo from satellite, radar screen from radar and drifting chart from drifting buoy which are the second stage. Once it all ready the data will editing by computer to preparing the broadcasting. Last stage the audience will receive the weather news from TV news reader, radio and recorded announcement.

@Echu
Hi, Echu. Please upload the chart in discussion as the tips suggest. It's quite important, since none is able to review your essay appropriately without the chart.

Please put my advice into practice as soon as possible. A knowledgeable and obliging contributor will come in and make useful comments for your. But he is not allowed to review your essay more than once. If it's up to him to inform you the chart should have been attached, you will lose the precious opportunity to get his valuable advice.

@Echu You will not get a passing score for this essay. Even without the chart, I can see that you have neglected to properly represent the required elements of a Task 1 essay. There is no clear overview, no discussion paragraphs that cover a comparison or trending discussion, no analysis of provided information. You just decided to pick out the series of information that you could find and then post it in a mechanical way in the essay. This single paragraph representation of the diagram you were provided will be given a failing score due to so many writing task violations that you will have just wasted your money and time had this been the actual test. There is no way a presentation like this will pass. I suggest that you review the other essays here and try to emulate what you see. There is already useful advice in each essay thread for you to consider and apply to your own work. When you come back here, please upload the image along with your essay so that I can assist you in developing your writing skills in a more proper manner.