My intro on comparative essay using King Lear and The Tempest

I have to write a comparative essay using King Lear and The Tempest.
The topic is "In both plays, in what ways do sex and violence function together.

This is what I have so far.

Throughout Shakespeare's The Tempest and King Lear, sex and love are brought together with violence, war, and politics. In King Lear, Regan and Goneril, the villain in the play, plot against their, father, King Lear. They are power hungry and will do anything to obtain authority even resorting to violence such as blinding Gloucester for going against their word. However, Goneril and Regan's love for Edmund becomes their downfall. Their lust and jealously causes them to kill each other. In The Tempest, Prospero makes a big deal about Ferdinand not taking away Miranda's virginity and proceeds to put him through a series of test. He forces Ferdinand into servitude using violence. Prospero is using Miranda's virginity to get back his kingdom. In both plays, the characters use sex and violence to get what they want whether it's for power, love, or politics.

Is my thesis good?

Greetings!

I like your opening sentence. However, the following sentences seem to be a very abbreviated version of the action in the plays; it's sort of like "one-minute Shakespeare" -- you've essentially told the whole story in a few sentences and not left yourself much of anywhere to go. Try to talk a little less specifically about the action, and a little more generally about the use of sex and violence in your opening. I'll give you an example using essentially your words, but without giving away too much detail in the opening:

"Throughout Shakespeare's The Tempest and King Lear, sex and love are brought together with violence, war, and politics. In King Lear, Regan and Goneril, the villains in the play, plot against their, father, King Lear. Their hunger for power leads them into acts of violence and revenge, while their love for Edmund becomes their downfall, leading to a tragic end. In The Tempest, Prospero guards Miranda's virginity with acts of violence and forced servitude to get back his kingdom. In both plays, the characters use sex and violence to get what they want whether for power, love, or politics."

Then, in the following paragraphs, you can go into more detailed anaysis. I hope this is helpful!

Thanks,

Sarah, EssayForum.com

Thanks this helped a lot!

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Since this topic is specific to your course content, I suggest beginning with an internet search using keywords such as "King Lear" and "physical, spiritual journey." You can also contact your college or academic advisor, as they may be able to connect you with study groups that know more about your specific topic.

Once you have written your essay, feel free to post it here and I can help you organize and edit it.

Good luck!

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