The admission essay for University of the People - choosing a prompt of the two

Hi, firstly I want to show my gratefulness to EssayForum.com. You are really helpful. Thank you so much.
I really want to get admission from the University of the People, the first free online university in the world. The university require applicants to write between 400-500 words essay answering one of two questions and this is my chosen one:

1.How do you think your university studies will affect your career in the future?
or
2. In what ways can your fellow students help you to achieve your learning goals at the University of the People?

I am not an Englishman and my writing skill is so moderate that I am afraid of both my essay expression and its content. I planed to study Information Technologies in this University.

Please help me check and improve it to become more persuadable as soon as possible because its deadline is 12/5. I really appreciate you great help.

We'd love to read over your essay for you. But.. where's the essay?
Which essay topic did you choose?

Hi,

I'm currently studying at UoP taking Computer Science course. I hope I can help you but you still need to submit your essay first then we can help you with some corrections.