First of all, I would say this is the problems and solutions essay. Although the thread doesn't require you to write about causes and effects of Vietnamese curriculum, I think they should be written in the first body paragraph. Solutions should be written in the second body paragraph.
Here are my ideas:
Paraphrase the threads and show what you're going to write on the body paragraph. (3 sentences)
- Students could feel streetful because they can not stand so many pressures from many sides such as family, school. For example, the suicide at Nguyen Khuyen high school. (2 sentences).
- Although students must study too much, in fact, the unemployment rate is increasing. Give the examples (2 sentences).
- Reduce some subjects which are useless with the future jobs of the students. Give some useless subjects, I'm sure you know what they are. (2 sentences)
- Instead of spending too much time for teaching theory, schools should make chances for students to practice. (1 sentence)
- Students should learn subjects they like rather than learn all. (1 sentence)
Summarize the ideas above. (2 sentences)
My English is limited but I hope that can help you.