Help with an introduction for an essay on the stereotype that men shouldn't be nurses

So here is my rough draft for my introduction: "When the first nursing school was started, only men were considered "pure" enough to become nurses. Now it is almost opposite! Instead of being an all-male nurse population it is now predominantly female. Why is this so? Men are capable of doing all the same things that women can do and more. Well as I did my research I discovered why females dominate the nursing population."

In the introduction you need to introduce the topic. So, introduce the "nursing"profession and its objectives very briefly with one sentence or maximum two. Then have another one to talk about male participation in nursing. Then introduce this argument. You can do a little bit of research by googling this topic to find good points for this essay.

Do your introduction yourself and post it to this forum. We'll give our comments for you to improve. :)

Thanks for your help!

I think you should take out the ''Well as I did my research..''. Finish it with a sentence that tells the top (let's say 3) reasons. Then use each to expand in a body paragraph

Hmmm I do not understand what " only men were considered "pure" enough to become nurses" means. Anyway I like your introduction, but sometimes it seems as if though you are talking with someone. Like when you have said "Well as I did my research" and "Now it is almost opposite!". But sometimes it makes the essay more interesting. lol. It depends on what the essay is for I guess.