hai, i am a student of English Diploma Program, i have an assignment to write an essay about technology can improve English skills, but i think i have a problem with my introduction, please help me
this is my introduction:
"Nowadays internet is very common for people. They use internet to search articles, watch videos in youtube, or have a dicussion in forum group. Internet also can used to improve English skills trough youtube and English forum. How can Youtube and English forum improve English skills?"
Hi Kurnia, you have written an introductory statement that is good enough for an ESL student. However, you ended it with an open ended question instead of a proper thesis statement. You need to complete the introduction content in order to improve it. My introduction, based upon what you wrote, would go something like this:
The internet has given people an avenue to pursue their linguistic interests outside of the classroom. People can easily access free language tutorials both in the written and spoken form through websites such as YouTube and English discussion forums. Thus, it is believed that technology can help improve the English skills of both ESL and academic English learners. I support this belief due to a number of reasons that I will be discussing within this essay.
From that point, you can just enumerate your supporting facts and personal experiences, if any, that can help strengthen your supported position. Just remember to cite the pros and cons of internet based language learning and you will be all set with the content of your essay :-)
thanks @vangiespen :)
how about this, i complete my essay
How YouTube and English discussion forum can improve our English skills
Nowadays internet is very common for people. People can easily access internet for free language tutorials through websites such as YouTube and English discussion forum. Thus, it is believed that technology can help to improve the English skills especially for English second learner. How can YouTube and English discussion forums improve English skills? There are number of reasons that I will be discussing within this essay.
The first is YouTube can improve listening skills. YouTube is a video sharing website that users can watch or upload a video. From YouTube we can improve our English skills by watching the videos, especially videos with English language. The skills that we can improve is our listening skills, because by watching videos we are not only watch a video, but we also listen the audio, so that is very useful.
The second is English discussion forum can improve your writing and reading skills. English discussion forum is a group that we can discuss about English. In English discussion forum there are many users from other countries, so we can share information there or we can get new information from there. In English discussion forum we can improve our writing skills, because we can ask someone to check our work, then someone will correct our grammar error or someone will give us a feedback about our work, so we can understand about our weaknesses. From English discussion forum we also can improve our reading skills, because in that forum we will find the other works, so we can read and try to understand about their work and try help them. So it would be useful to improve the reading skills. In English discussion forum we are also can improve our vocabulary, because if there are many words that we do not understand, we can search it in our dictionary then our vocabulary will increase.
From those we know that internet is useful for us as an English second learner to improve our English.
Hi Kurnia, let me show you the mistakes in your writing and how to correct it. The improvements to your essay that I made will be in capital letters :-) Most of your problems are in the use of connecting words and singular to plural rules. You also need to remove the repetitiveness of your word usage. You use the word repetitively a number of times, which reflects a limited English vocabulary on your part.
Nowadays THE internet is very common for people. People can easily access THE internet for free language tutorials through websites such as YouTube and English discussion forumS. Thus, it is believed that technology can help to improve the English skills especially for of English as a second language learners. How can YouTube and English discussion forums improve English skills? There are number of reasons that I will be discussing within this essay.
The first is YouTube can improve listening skills. YouTube is a video sharing website that WHERE users can watch or upload a video. From YouTube we can improve our English skills by watching the ENGLISH videos, especially videos with English language . The skills that we can improve is are our listening AND VOCABULARY skills, because by watching videos we are not only watch a video , but we also listen TO the audio, so that is very useful IN TERMS OF AUDITORY DEVELOPMENT IN THE LANGUAGE.
The second is ARE THE English discussion forumS THAT can improve your writing and reading WRITING AND COMPREHENSION skills. AN English discussion forum is COMPOSED OF a group that we can discuss about DISCUSSES IN THE ENGLISH LANGUAGE English . In English discussion forum t There are many users from other countries, I AM ONE OF THE MEMBERS OF SUCH A FORUM AND I LEARNED THAT so we can share information there or we can get new information from there THEM. In English discussion forum w We can improve our writing skills, because we can ask someone to check our work, then someone will correct our grammar errorS or someone will give us a feedback about our work, . s So we can understand about LEARN ABOUT our weaknesses. From English discussion forum we USERS CAN also can improve our THEIR reading COMPREHENSION skills, because in that forum we will find the other works, so we FORUM MEMBERS can read and try to understand about their work and try help them. So it would be useful to improve the reading skills.In English discussion forum we are also FINALLY, THE FORUM ALSO HELPS ITS MEMBERS TO can improve our THEIR vocabulary, because if there are many words that we do not understand, we can search it in our dictionary then our vocabulary will increase.
From those we know that THE internet is useful for us as an English second LANGUAGE learner to improve our USE OF THE English LANGUAGE.
The weakest part of the essay at this point, regardless of grammar is your conclusion. It is too short and does not really summarize the content of the essay properly. You need to pay attention to that and make sure you always provide an accurate conclusion in all your essays.
thank you very much, yes that is my problem, do you have an assignment or note for me to improve my writing skills?
Kurnia, you need to follow your own advice :-) Watch the YT videos, participate actively in this forum, and most specially, do not stop reading and writing in the English language. Those are the best ways that you can consciously and unconsciously find yourself improving your English language skills. If you immerse yourself in the world of English, you will find yourself becoming a part of it. It is similar to the way that tourists pick up a language when they are in a foreign land. The more they hear it and have to use it, the better they become over time.
English is one of the easiest languages to learn because it is one of the international languages of business. It is the major language used as a secondary language across the globe, so you don't have to worry about how you can get better at it. You just need to be dedicated to the practice and use of the language with each opportunity you can get. By actively participating in this forum, you will get exactly that. I believe that forum participation will be one of the biggest factors in the improvement of your English language use. After all, you will be forced to read, think, and write in English here. You can practice the spoken by reading your corrected essays aloud :-)
This is not a skill you can develop overnight. This is also not a skill you have to develop alone. If you keep trying, we will keep supporting you and helping you so that you will be well prepared to take whatever English test you have to take in the future :-)
i will keep trying and participate actively in this forum, however i do not know how to correct, because my english is still bad, but thanks for your help and your support :)
Nowadays THE internet is very EXTREMELY common for people. People can easily access ACCESS THE internet EASILY for free language tutorials through websites such as YouTube and English discussion forum. Thus, it is believed that technology can help BE USEFUL to improve the English skills especially for English second learner.
common for TO people
... so that WHICH is very useful.
