Our lives are a journey with regular decision points ; Narrative on moving states

Our lives are a journey with regular decision points and significant moment strung together by everyday activities. In our first essay for this course, you will select a significant moment in your life and tell the story of that significant moment.

Your narrative should include all the characteristics of narrative writing. Your essay needs to be a minimum of 3, full pages long. It should be double spaced (no more than double) with standard margin sizes. Please include the following heading in the upper right hand corner of the first page:

I decided to write mine on moving from Las Vegas to Maryland but am completely lost! I have no idea how to continue this essay. Please help me with ideas on what to include to make it am effective narrative, with a conflict and resolution. Under this is what I wrote so far.

"Okay, time to leave!" my mom said as she placed the last suitcase in the car. The moment she said this, I began to think about the town I was leaving behind, I had spent my whole life in Las Vegas and although happy to move, it was a bit upsetting to think about leaving my family and friends. My stepdad had recently received a job in Maryland and although a nice opportunity for change I could not help but feel a bit somber...

Below are my revisions :
>I began to think about the town I was leaving behind, I had spent my whole life in Las Vegas and although happy to move, it was a bit upsetting to think about leaving my family and friends.

I began to think about the town I was leaving behind - Las Vegas. Although I was happy to move, I was still a bit upset to think about leaving my family and friends. I had spent my whole life in Las Vegas for (how many years?)

>My stepdad stepfather had recently received a job...

Just always remember that in narration, you are "as if telling stories to the children". Thus, it is vital that there should be an element of surprise. Use TIME SIGNALS to greatly connect one point to another. Your ideas here should be chronologically arranged.


Write down all your ideas about the topic. Afterwards, arrange them logically and chronologically. That is the strategy. Please continue your narrative composition even though you feel you're taking the wrong path. We will help you how to improve it.

This is nice. I like the way you've given the start :)


I like if you stopped after the leaving behind part;
The moment she said this, I began to think about the town I was leaving behind. Las Vegas, the town where I spent my whole life ! Although I looked forward to moving out, I began to feel upset about leaving my family and friends.