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European Master in Public health with a specialization in Advanced Biostatistics and Epidemiology

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Jan 10, 2022   #1
Hi Everyone,

Kindly share your input and corrections regarding my motivational essay for the erasmus mundus master in public health. Thanks


My experience with my grandmother who had a traumatic accident and due to poor healthcare services became dependent in carrying out her activities of daily living stimulated my interest in becoming a healthcare provider.

My interest in studying the European Master in Public health with a second year specialization in Advanced Biostatistics and Epidemiology is to be empowered with the knowledge and skills required to promote health and improve quality of life of the populace especially the underserved. Having observed in the xxx health system, there is dearth of data and poor disease surveillance to effectively develop health interventions and policies that could make an impact on the people, especially those in rural communities.

I am particular about chronic lifestyle-related diseases (CLRD) which have become an epidemic and are the cause of over 62% of deaths globally, with developing countries accounting for a major proportion of mortality rate. As a xxx, I am involved in managing complications posed by these conditions and have observed the financial burden and toll it takes on quality of life. Therefore, I look forward to exploring effective methods of creating awareness, health intervention programmes and promoting healthy lifestyle activities among the populace.

During my undergraduate, I gained knowledge in courses transferable to this programme. As well as carried out a research assessing the quality of life of patients with type 2 diabetes and worked as clinical research assistant. I acquired research skills required in preparing interview questions, data collection, analysis and interpretation. Also, as a xxx, I collaborate with a multi-disciplinary team of professionals to deliver healthcare services to patients from different backgrounds in various healthcare setting and I initiated the establishment of a physiotherapy clinic in a hospital in a rural community. These have advanced my knowledge of patient care, management skills and ability to work with a multicultural group as a team to achieve a common goal.

Furthermore, while volunteering with xxx, I conducted focused group discussions, interviews and literature reviews on giving birth in xxx which was to catalyse the accountability for maternal mortality. Also as a peer education leader, I organised health outreach in organisations and communities with absent or poor health facilities and also sexual health education and drug abuse campaigns in schools. My experiences have therefore, given me relevant exposure to research and public health related work. I hope to build on this knowledge with the opportunities this programme offers.

The Europubhealth+ programme will give me an opportunity to study in universities renowned for their innovative approach to research and teaching abroad, undergo an internship and network with people of different backgrounds. These will facilitate cultural exchange and enable me gain a global perspective on health.

I am confident this programme will equip me with the requisite tools to improve population health status, engage in research of public health challenges that can consequently influence the development of effective health policies, intervention programmes.

Ultimately, I will like to work in a research capacity with governmental and non-governmental organisations to contribute towards prevention of public health diseases especially CLRD, increasing accessibility to affordable healthcare, implementation of effective health intervention programmes and policies. I believe that the Europubhealth+ programme will provide me with the tools required to achieve my career goals and thrive. I look forward to being a part of this cohort.
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Jan 11, 2022   #2
The first paragraph should be completely removed. It sounds very amateurish. Almost as if you are applying to college rather than to an international masters scholarship program. That presentation is not only confusing to read, but also little applicable to the discussion requirements as outlined by the prompts.

cause of over 62% of deaths globally, with developing countries

Focus on the effects within your country alone. Your aim is to improve public health services in your country, not the world. Focus on what is truly important and where the learned information will be applied. Discuss the data as it affects the health of your national or local population.

I gained knowledge in courses transferable to this programme. As well as carried out a research

Mention the specific programs you studied as is applies to both coursers. Discuss your research as if it were to be considered as a part of your future thesis. A continuing research program based on your previous results would be of note to the reviewer if you can explain why it is important to continue your research.

The suggested changes will require you to revise the other paragraphs as well so that you will not exceed the maximum word count. Please note that you should review your essay, in this case, for potential irrelevant discussions or exceeding explanations or examples of your learnings and skills. Be precise with information where needed. Avoid any general references since the reviewer needs specific information to consider in relation to your CV expanded explanations.

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