Hi i need ur help on my statement of intent!! Plz give me ur take on this..ty
If I ever have to describe the kind of life I desire, in a word, that word would be 'extraordinary'. I don't want to just survive, but I want to create,build,inspire the world and mould myself into the amazing person I could ever be. I'm xxx Engineer holding Electrical & Electronics degree from xxx[/i]. I am a smart, intelligent, artistic and optimistic person. I am looking forward to studying in your university because I want to be better than the best.
During my schooling, I was a nerd who always topped my class. Learning things from books was easy. I was good at solving problems which followed the rules of science. But to be ahead in the world ,books weren't enough. Hence I determined to wake up every day and be better than yesterday, pushing myself to new heights which would scare me and dare me to survive.
As I went to college to pursue my Bachelor's degree in Electrical and Electronics, I developed a strong foundation in analytical skills, sciences which required complex,tedious mathematics and logical skills. I chose to diversify my focus from books to the cobmmunity. I participated,organised multiple welfare events for the uneducated at one's damnedest. Travelling around various places, understanding cultures, I realised life has more to offer. I also participated in various industrial training during my vacations to develop my skills and attended workshops on campus which inspired me to build a quadcopter as my project. My desire to build and innovate always lead me forward to learn.
With my above average academic grades,great analytical skills,social work I was selected for a full-time paid internship for a period of 6 months at a top MNC 'xxx', for their software department which I was a novice to, as I wasn't specialised in software. It's a telecom company and work seemed greek. But in short span, I learnt to work on Linux machines,SQL scripts and developed macros. I was soon entrusted with examining xxx communications' network traffic all over India and was also offered a permanent job at their headquarters.
Though the offer was great, I wanted better. In 10years (secretly 5years) I see myself as a head of a top organisation, innovating and inspiring the world. I might establish my own company too like my father. In my attempts to choose a place which would provide me great exposure,opportunities and fullfill my dreams, I choose Melbourne, as it is one of the best student cities in the world and a great place to live and learn. And Melbourne Business School, being one of the elite schools not only in Australia but in the entire world, it would be my privilege to learn from the great. I believe my study here would help me grow in professional and personal front as an amazing entrepreneur and wonderful person, as I would be surrounded by inspiring people who can teach me to inspire,innovate,lead and manage. I wish to be a part of the World-Class.
Hi @ srs 1994..
I think you made a great essay. But the sentece " I am a smart, intelligent, artistic and optimistic person" , i think you shouldnot write that because this cannot be evaluated.
