My main long-term objective is to establish a career in academia, teaching in the university while conducting my own research and supervising others. In order to achieve this, I have actively sought teaching and supervising opportunities during my PhD, including ##. I believe that my positive feedback are the reflection of my passion for sharing knowledge in an engaging way to convey information to students effectively. Also, I have already presented my work in a few UK meetings, and will have the chance to show it both orally and in the form of posters in both UK and international events this summer, having independently and successfully applied for funding to attend them. I have already designed a line of work, which I would like to follow once I have a more established academic career and can apply for substantial grants. Additionally, I have participated in a considerable amount of events for science dissemination and outreach, including the organisation of a fundraising and outreach event called %% in collaboration with &&. I consider that telling both academics and broader audiences what we do and find in the laboratory is of great importance if we want society to understand the importance of our research. I also think that these events help establishing solid relationships in a work team, which translates into a better environment in the workplace.I have written a journal article as first author from my MSc project, and am about to submit two more which use the data I have generated throughout my PhD. I also have a long and successful grant-writing history which has allowed me to fund every step of my superior education, including ++, ==, and @@.
Hello!
So I read through it and it has a bunch of inserts that you don't really say (%%, &&. etc) I was wondering if there was a reason to this?
Additionally:
I believe that my positive feedback are the reflection of my passion for sharing knowledge in an engaging way to convey information to students effectively. - Maybe it would be better to elaborate as to what the positive feedback is as they may not know
I have already presented + I have already designed + my superior education - the use of "already" and "superior" sound arrogant to me [but maybe that's just me?]
I consider that telling both academics and broader audiences what we do and find in the laboratory is of great importance if we want society to understand the importance of our research. - you're basically saying "if we want them to think an orange is a fruit, we tell them it is a fruit" I don't really see the point of this? Either emphasize that people don't see that orange is a fruit then explain how you will convince them that it is a fruit. [The orange being a fruit is a metaphor for the importance of your research, perhaps say what it could benefit society or whatever it is that your research is set out to do]
From this I have no idea what this cover letter is for, you generally brag about things you have done and don't implicitly say what you want or what you want to achieve, besides the generic "I want to teach and do my own research" - what makes you any different from other people who want to do exactly that? Is your research amazingly new? Do you have characteristics, experience, or traits that make you different and unique? If so, tell us!
Anyways, that's all I got. Hope this helps!
Hi Alejandro, first of all, WELCOME to the Essay Forum Family, you made a very good choice in consulting this website and its contributors before heading on to submission. We aim to provide you with the best and most accurate feedback your essay deserves.
Now, going back to your essay, PhD in Molecular Neuroscience is to start with, a very challenging field and to still aim for a higher and even greater challenge is, I believe, a noble act, indeed, as long as we are alive, we should not stop learning, study and do a little research on things happening in and around us.
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