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I am Joan from Taipei County. Whereas I am diligent and aspiring, I am also very easily to blend in with. Focusing on practical things, I consider myself being excel at analysing. My father has retired from air force, and now working as an advisor. My mother teaches in a Junior high school. Also I have got a younger brother who is still studying at a high school. Harmony is the very word to describe my family.
I have been learning painting since I was a junior high student. Although at high school with heavy workloads, I have never stopped improving my drawing skills. Because of my passion for arts, I have decided to apply for design, and luckily being accepted by industrial design department of xxx University as the second place.
At the first year, in order to catch up with other classmates, I have been focused on every lesson I have attended, and also spent a great amount of time practising hand drawing as well as making models.
At the sophomore year, I chose transport design as my major which to me was a completely new area. In this course, I have learnt not only how to design vehicles, but also the basic knowledge of its inner structure, 3D model making and advanced sketching skills. With all English-taught lessons, my English skills have improved considerably. In this year, I have also been in charge of handling any problems related to students' life and assignments, which really improved my communicating and problem-solving skills.
During my third year of college, I changed to study product design given the marketing condition in Taiwan. This course was designed and more excitingly, taught by many successful designers to help students (in groups) learn the ideas of current products as well as the procedure of discussion. During this year, I have learnt how to communicate with other people and express my ideas more effectively. Moreover, by giving presentations, I have also improved my speaking skills and finally overcome having cold feet in front of many people. Me and my classmates have also teamed to participate lots of competitions, such as IF concept design award and many other held by governments.
In addition, I have joined many volunteer activities held by school, like helping elementary schools and local communities in stage design, costume making and cleaning local parks.
Currently as a fourth-year student, I am working a project with my classmates in terms of improving household electronics, aiming to meet market's needs. The project, which I am the one who mainly write research summaries, is expected to be on display in Young Designer Exhibition in May 2016. My task in the group is not simply filtering myriad information, but also getting used to the working method master students take. Scrutinising and analysing are two vital elements I have learnt that enable products to reach the perfection.
In conclusion, the reason I applied for a master degree is to sharpen my design abilities due to the fact that I have realised the lectures taught in college were rather basic.
I am Joan from Taipei County. Whereas I am diligent and aspiring, I am also very easily to blend in with. Focusing on practical things, I consider myself being excel at analysing. My father has retired from air force, and now working as an advisor. My mother teaches in a Junior high school. Also I have got a younger brother who is still studying at a high school. Harmony is the very word to describe my family.
I have been learning painting since I was a junior high student. Although at high school with heavy workloads, I have never stopped improving my drawing skills. Because of my passion for arts, I have decided to apply for design, and luckily being accepted by industrial design department of xxx University as the second place.
At the first year, in order to catch up with other classmates, I have been focused on every lesson I have attended, and also spent a great amount of time practising hand drawing as well as making models.
At the sophomore year, I chose transport design as my major which to me was a completely new area. In this course, I have learnt not only how to design vehicles, but also the basic knowledge of its inner structure, 3D model making and advanced sketching skills. With all English-taught lessons, my English skills have improved considerably. In this year, I have also been in charge of handling any problems related to students' life and assignments, which really improved my communicating and problem-solving skills.
During my third year of college, I changed to study product design given the marketing condition in Taiwan. This course was designed and more excitingly, taught by many successful designers to help students (in groups) learn the ideas of current products as well as the procedure of discussion. During this year, I have learnt how to communicate with other people and express my ideas more effectively. Moreover, by giving presentations, I have also improved my speaking skills and finally overcome having cold feet in front of many people. Me and my classmates have also teamed to participate lots of competitions, such as IF concept design award and many other held by governments.
In addition, I have joined many volunteer activities held by school, like helping elementary schools and local communities in stage design, costume making and cleaning local parks.
Currently as a fourth-year student, I am working a project with my classmates in terms of improving household electronics, aiming to meet market's needs. The project, which I am the one who mainly write research summaries, is expected to be on display in Young Designer Exhibition in May 2016. My task in the group is not simply filtering myriad information, but also getting used to the working method master students take. Scrutinising and analysing are two vital elements I have learnt that enable products to reach the perfection.
In conclusion, the reason I applied for a master degree is to sharpen my design abilities due to the fact that I have realised the lectures taught in college were rather basic.
