My apologies, I did not notice that you had posted a new version. Let me help you out now :-)
To take a journey in art is to follow a path that is never ending;y ou will never know all there is to know or see and discover all there is out there. You will find yourself 10 years down that path still discovering new things, getting excited and inspired by the most ordinary of things, question the media to which we are exposed, whether it be the design of a C.D.cover, a window display, the layout of a room or even the shapes and lines of a shoe.
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These separate paragraphs should be combined into one complete paragraph. It is a good introduction to your statement of purpose when organized into a paragraph format.- ... a path that is never ending
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questioning the media...
After completing my bachelors degree of textile design , I started my professional beginning with Mac Exports India. I worked as the creative designer where I was given buyers of UK and US for home textiles and fashion apparels. It was a great learning experience. Working with the buyers and understanding trends and forecasts in different ways and learning its importance. Using Adobe and Corel for bringing the requirements of the client to life and then executing them to the final stage of production .
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bachelors degree in textile design... started myprofession at Mac... buyers
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learned to understand the trends and forecasts...
With the UCLA, MA in Design|Media Arts, I know that I have reached my destination to fulfill my dreams and aspirations. A master's degree program in media arts will help me take advantage of emerging technologies for the purpose of creating works of art(textile surface generation). To study topics in psychology, human-computer interaction and media theory. Storytelling in visual mediums, video game technology and producing commercial works of art are so interesting and exciting
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Teaching was one experience of a lifetime when I realized that the work of learning does not stop here, rather, it begins! It goes on forever. Right knowledge with the effective method has to be put across through different mediums so that it reaches out to a large number of people. And the best communicative method in todays time is Digital Media.
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Don't lecture the admissions officer about something he is a professional at.-
Do not discuss anything not related to emphasizing your purpose for an MA course. These are just word fillers that will make the admissions officer throw away your essay before he finishes reading it.And I believe I have the right sensibilities towards design and the correct approach for developing an effective communication through the use of technology to become a successful entrepreneur in the later stages of my life.
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I cannot wait to become that expert in this field to work as a talented and a great artist and a researcher with the right sensitivities towards digital media design and the environment .I strongly believe that a lot is left for me to offer tothis world, to the field of education and design industry. I can tackle with anything that comes my way to reach to this, very delightful part of my life.
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Please note the strikeouts that signify unnecessary statements. These are the paragraphs that have no connection to your stating your purpose of interest in the MA course. I advise you to delete those statements and follow the other markings I have placed for you. The deleted paragraphs will shorten this essay and also tighten its focus on your purpose for enrolling in the course instead.