To be a part of mobile revolution. SoP for Postgraduate, with 10 yrs professional experience.

plz help to me to get input for below SoP
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Over the past decade, the ability to communicate using mobile devices, has revolutionized our lives in multiple ways. I believe this is just the beginning. The field of mobile communication is still in its incipient stages and a lot more needs to be done. I would like to be part of this revolution and contribute towards it by researching in this field.

During my Bachelors of Engineering, I was impressed by the potential of mobile handsets of initial days from Motorola and Nokia. I got an opportunity to do a project at Defence Research and Development Organisation (DRDO), Bangalore, India in the field of RADAR mono-pulse antenna. I learned a lot from this association, which inspired me to pursue career in research in the future.

During my final year of Bachelors of Engineering, I demonstrated transmission of analogue data by CDMA technology. Herein, the transmission of audio data from transmitter to receiver was demonstrated, with waveform on to the CRO. The necessary PCB for pseudo random code generator was made. The receiver end was 'the audio at speaker'.

Further, to understand the practical aspects of the telecom systems, I moved to corporate world to gain the rich and live experience in the mobile technology. During my current job at xxxxx, I have been promoted thrice in recent 5 years and appointed as xxx and, I am glad to mention that I received xxxxx sponsorship to pursue Masters of Technology (M.Tech.) as a part time student.

Due to my immense interest and in order to quench the curiosity, I was able to manage part time Master of Technology with full time job. It is my deep interest in studies which motivates me for the effective time management & goal setting. After seeing practical aspects and fully understanding the system, I can now interlink the shortcomings and things which need to be further developed.

My research topic as part of master's thesis was "xxxxxxxxxxxx" under the guidance of Prof. xxxx . It is about the performance elevation of the movement-based location update scheme. The dynamic movement-based location management with HLR/VLR architecture is combined with the selective paging approach. It ensures the efficient and optimized used of the capacity of the wireless network by considering the total cost associated with the home location register, the visitor location register and using the intelligent paging scheme associated with it.

During the continuation of the thesis, I gathered the constructive knowledge and as a result, a research paper title "xxxxxxxxxxxxx" got published in 'xxxx'

I must put these together to accomplish my goal of undertaking progressive study. I wish further to undertake full time master studies to able to exploit my potential to the fullest as practical industry experience in the mobile protocol domain will be an enhancement for the same.

This has strengthened my resolve to study at your esteemed institution. Further, I wish to apply for PhD, after full time masters studies.
I look forward to receiving your acceptance.

You can write "I would like to be a part of this revolution and contribute significantly in this field by multi faceted research." instead of "I would like to be part of this revolution and contribute towards it by researching in this field."

Also write 'capitalize' my potential as a substitute of exploit my potential.
Rest of the essay seems alright. Great effort!

Sagar, the purpose of your desire to receive an MS degree stems from your interest in the field of mobile data and communication. However, that is not clearly presented in your opening statement. That is the line that must contain your purpose for higher study. So, rather than simply stating that you wish to engage in more research in the field, you need to be more precise and descriptive. At the end of the introduction you must tell the reviewer what kind of research you plan to perform at their university.

The second paragraph should continue this line of thought by explaining how you see this university in particular helping you to advance your studies in this field. Explain the way that your future research will directly tie in with either existing research by their professors or by starting a new kind of research in the field that will increase the university's profile in terms of cutting edge research in this field.

From there, you should explain your college background in summary form. The best way to do that is just to mention the degree that you received and then explain how your thesis put you on this path of more advanced research. That should be no more than a paragraph. Lead that into your masters of technology degree and then transition to the published work.

When you discuss the published work, you should use a complete paragraph to represent the way that the research was developed, why it was accepted for publication, and the comments you received or recognition you received after it was published. This will be the part that represents your complete early academic background.

For your conclusion, explain how you see the research that you see completing at this university as changing the landscape of mobile data and technology. Ensure that you highlight your desire to pursue all possible research in this field through the help of the university then close it.