CV Professional profile - summary of a good achievements, goals or/and skills

Here's my "professional profile" that I'll include in my CV. Is it a good achievements/goals/skills summary (given the sentences limitation). Any errors? thank you in advance

I am a recent Law & Business graduate looking for entry-level development opportunities to start off a successful career in the banking industry, an area where I have excelled but more importantly where I am most interested in. After fantastic international study-abroad experiences and travels I've realized that a multicultural environment would be the best to grow both personally and professionally.

I am a recent Law & Business graduate looking for entry-level development opportunities towhere start off a successful career in the banking industry, an area where I have excelled but more importantly where I am most interested in . (I think it's better if you switch excelled and interested. I think firms are more interested in whether you have excelled at it than if you were interested in it) After experiencingfantastic(Since this is a professional essay, I don't think "fantastic" would be the right word. Try to look for another word that falls in line with how you display professionalism. Use "outstanding" or "remarkable" instead.)international study-abroad experiencesprograms and travels I'vehave realized that a multicultural environment would be the best to grow both personally and professionallyI can professionally and personally grow best in a multicultural environment .

A tip. Whenever you're preparing a resume/CV or any other professional document, NEVER use contractions (i.e I've, I haven't, etc) Write them out in full (i.e. I have, I have not). From my experiences, people do not like contractions when reviewing over applications or resume.

Other than that. I think it's not bad. However, if possible, try to better connect your desire of working in a banking industry with your experiences studying abroad. Let your first sentence sort of lead into the second sentence, because that's not currently happening. That's if possible. If you're already at your character limit then it's fine the way it is.

I hope I made your resume better and I hope you succeed in your endeavors.