Entire Prompt: Based on your knowledge of the physical therapy professions and its challenges today, what qualities do you feel are necessary for success as a physical therapist?
the features of a successful physical therapist
There are many misconceptions about physical therapy and a major misconception is that it's not as easy as it seems. Physical therapists face various challenges and must have the integrity to persevere through the workplace. A successful physical therapist must be able to exhibit critical thinking, patience, and compassion. As an intern at Sports Physical Therapy I was able to witness a great physical therapist that went above and beyond for her patients.
As the patient performed her exercises at the doorway, and in a matter of minutes she significantly increased her shoulder range of motion; a goal that the patient and therapist have been trying to achieve for months. Neither I nor the patient could believe what just happened. The physical therapist puts her hand on the patient's shoulder, smiled and said "I'm so glad, we found something that works better for you." After the patient's session, I asked the physical therapist what she tried differently. The physical therapist called these type of exercises "open chain kinetic exercises". I asked why we haven't tried those before and she replied, that physical therapy is a "science" that requires a flexible treatment approach, and that there's more than one way to approach a problem.
The physical therapist that I worked with was able to help her patients achieve their functional goals while providing a compassionate environment in which to do so. It was clear from the looks on her patients' faces that she genuinely cared about them and their goals. During that internship, I have come to learn that physical therapists are more than rehab scientists; they are a multi skilled health professional that are earnest and compassionate. Witnessing this taught me what kind of individual that a physical therapist should be.Hi, I can't say i know anything about physical therapy, but here are some pointers that you could consider.
first off some sentences are longer than they need be...go directly to the point.
For instance:
There are many misconceptions about physical therapy and a major misconception is that it's not as easy as it seems.
You could change this too: Physical therapy is not as easy as it seems; this is one of the many misconceptions surrounding the practice.
Also you state that physical therapists require "critical thinking, patience, and compassion," so you need to elaborate on why exactly these are important.
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4780 Katrina , the first thing you have to address in this essay is your wrong opening sentence. The major misconception is not that physical therapy is "not as easy as it seems". The misconception, is that physical therapy is "easier than it seems". Using the first reference ties in with the statement that therapists face various challenges and have specific traits in order to perform the job.
The next situation you have to address, is that the essay became more about the therapist that you shadowed rather than what traits of that intern influenced you to become a physical therapist. Take the story that you told only this time, focus on you instead. Describe what you observed and what the whole process led you to believe would make you a great physical therapist in the future. This is about you wishing to emulate a person instead of you representing the person in your essay almost as if that person were the applicant instead of you. Therefore, the second paragraph needs a major overhaul in terms of presentation. The last paragraph can be kept intact and used as the concluding statement just the same.
As the patient performed her exercises ...
->The following is my suggestion of the sentence
->The significant improvement of patient`s shoulder range of motion makes patient and I can not believe that we have achieve our goal in this moment.
->I would recommend that shrinking the sentence and making it clear to understand.
