Hi. I have been working on this narrative for PA school for several months and need some input on how it is flowing. I also have read it so many times, I can't pick out grammatical errors anymore! It is supposed to be 5000 characters and I only have 3371. I am afraid of being too wordy. Any help would be greatly appreciated. Here it is:
While spending weeks in the hospital after a motorcycle accident that, ultimately, claimed my 14-year old brother's life, I observed how vital each health care member is to patient care. I took a semester off of college following his accident to focus on my purpose in life. During that time, I was able to differentiate what matters most to me-people. My fascination with the human body and mind is what sparked my interest in the healthcare field. Everyday is a chance to learn something new. I have a daily personal objective to show compassion towards each person I encounter, regardless of the capacity of our relationship. I have witnessed and been the recipient of great compassion, and I merely wish to reciprocate this to society through my role as a Physician Assistant.
Knowing that I want to commit my life to helping others and my interest in healthcare, I began working in a pediatric dental office during my senior year of college. Through this experience, I have had the opportunity to constantly interact with patients in a fast-paced environment. I have gained experience beneficial for a Physician Assistant career by reviewing patients' health history, educating patients, scheduling appointments, and performing routine charting. In a surgery setting, I have been able to assist and observe the work of doctors and nurses. I embrace the fact that Physician Assistants play a continuous role in patient care from the initial patient assessment to post-surgery follow-up. I believe this type of involvement allows a Physician Assistant to build a relationship with the patient. I love that being a Physician Assistant would allow me to treat a wide range of ailments present in routine patients, so that the doctor can focus on more complex patients. The vast array of fields available to Physician Assistants is just one of the aspects of the job that interests me.
Due to my insight on what it feels like to be a patient, I am confident that I will strive to listen and demonstrate a calm and helpful demeanor while seeking a specific solution for each patient. I will be empathetic; since, I understand the fear that illness or the unknown generates. I have learned that there is an emotional aspect to health, in addition to, the physical one. Having the proper support makes a huge difference in the recovery of a patient.
While volunteering at a local Good Shepherd clinic for the underserved, I learned that I would prefer to work in a rural setting. Being that I, myself, have not been able to afford health insurance, I find it easy to relate to those not as fortunate and believe everyone deserves an equal opportunity for healthcare. Through this profession, I believe I will be able to provide quality care and make a difference in many peoples' lives.
I recall the challenges faced throughout my life, and recognize that they have mirrored my own growths and achievements. My goal is to become a Physician Assistant with my primary focus in pediatrics. I am currently in the process of furthering my own knowledge by becoming a certified phlebotomist. I have no doubt that becoming a Physician Assistant will offer me the fulfillment that I am looking for. I recognize the level of commitment required for this profession and desire to further my education and take on a career which is both challenging and demanding.
I took a semester off from college following his accident, to focus on my purpose in life.
During that time, I was able to differentiatefigure out what matters most to me; people.
Every day ---This is a common mistake, but here, 'every' and 'day' are two words.--- is a chance to learn something new.
I believe this type of involvement allows a Physician Assistant how to build a relationship with the patient.
I love the fact that being a Physician Assistant would allow me to treat a wide range of ailments present in routine patients, so that the doctor can focus on more complex patients.
I will be empathetic; since, I understand the fear that illness or the unknown generates.
While volunteering at a local Good Shepherd clinic for the under served , I learned that I would prefer to work in a rural setting.
Because I myself have not been able to afford health insurance, ...
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