COULD SOME KIND SOUL REVIEW MY STATEMENT OF PURPOSE AND POINT OUT FLAWS :)
Respected Sir/Madam
I would like to thank you for giving me this opportunity to introduce myself in order to apply for the Master of Manufacturing Technology (MMT) program. I obtained my Bachelor of Engineering degree with specialisation in Industrial and Production Engineering from the prestigious P.E.S College of Engineering affiliated to Visvesvaraya Technological University, Karnataka, India in 2015 standing second in my class with a cumulative GPA of 8.96/10. I was also awarded at various national and state level conferences for creditable performance.
My ultimate objective is to help my home country achieve the international benchmarks of manufacturing like those achieved by German organisations. German engineering is internationally recognised as synonymous with superior quality and reliability. My association with the space program of my home country is one of the important steps that I have taken towards realising this goal. However, during this tenure I have realised that slow rate of modernisation and delay in upgrading technological know-how are some of the biggest roadblocks towards achieving the said objective. In order to achieve this goal I need to gain further competence in the field of manufacturing and production engineering which the Master of Manufacturing Technology (MMT) program at the Technische Universität Dortmund will allow me to gain. Upon intense scrutiny of the course objectives and curriculum, I am convinced that the program is essential for me to attain my objectives. Further research leading to a PhD is one of my immediate priorities upon completion of my master's degree.
Pursuing my graduate education at a multicultural and multifaceted university such as the Technische Universität Dortmund enables me to improve my interpersonal skills. Further, I will also get the opportunity to evolve in an international environment giving me the opportunity to meet new people and empathise with different points of view. I am convinced that such an opportunity will enrich my perspectives. Given my academic record and professional experience, I feel that I will be able to match the standards of excellence that are embodied by Technische Universität Dortmund and it will be a privilege for me to attend this program. I look forward to your correspondence.
Thank you for reviewing my application
Respected Sir/Madam
I would like to thank you for giving me this opportunity to introduce myself in order to apply for the Master of Manufacturing Technology (MMT) program. I obtained my Bachelor of Engineering degree with specialisation in Industrial and Production Engineering from the prestigious P.E.S College of Engineering affiliated to Visvesvaraya Technological University, Karnataka, India in 2015 standing second in my class with a cumulative GPA of 8.96/10. I was also awarded at various national and state level conferences for creditable performance.
My ultimate objective is to help my home country achieve the international benchmarks of manufacturing like those achieved by German organisations. German engineering is internationally recognised as synonymous with superior quality and reliability. My association with the space program of my home country is one of the important steps that I have taken towards realising this goal. However, during this tenure I have realised that slow rate of modernisation and delay in upgrading technological know-how are some of the biggest roadblocks towards achieving the said objective. In order to achieve this goal I need to gain further competence in the field of manufacturing and production engineering which the Master of Manufacturing Technology (MMT) program at the Technische Universität Dortmund will allow me to gain. Upon intense scrutiny of the course objectives and curriculum, I am convinced that the program is essential for me to attain my objectives. Further research leading to a PhD is one of my immediate priorities upon completion of my master's degree.
Pursuing my graduate education at a multicultural and multifaceted university such as the Technische Universität Dortmund enables me to improve my interpersonal skills. Further, I will also get the opportunity to evolve in an international environment giving me the opportunity to meet new people and empathise with different points of view. I am convinced that such an opportunity will enrich my perspectives. Given my academic record and professional experience, I feel that I will be able to match the standards of excellence that are embodied by Technische Universität Dortmund and it will be a privilege for me to attend this program. I look forward to your correspondence.
Thank you for reviewing my application