That is one of the admission essays for an MBA program. I believe the essay is supposed to reflect positive features of my character... Also I think that introduction & conclusion are not required in such essay. Would appreciate your feedback and suggestions on how to improve it.
Essay 2 : In 500 words or less describe three things others do not know about you.
Recently, around 3 months ago, I started keeping a diary. It began with writing down my short-term and long-term goals. Then I realized that I need to keep track of the progress I was making towards these goals. So I started making short notes about what I did each day to achieve any of the goals from my list. This practice has helped me to make sure that I don't waste my free time and that I spend it on something important. I have also realized that such small habits we develop throughout our lives, as keeping diary or doing sports, actually have a great impact on our personalities.
Another fact that others don't know about me is that I can swim one naval mile in less than 30 minutes. It all started when I was 14 years old. At that age I thought that I should pick a sport for myself, and I decided to start going to a swimming pool on a regular basis. Though it may sound as an ordinary decision, but it has drastically changed my appearance. My height was only 162 cm before I started swimming, but after only 4 months my height was already 181 cm, and my regular exercises in the swimming pool were the main factor behind that. Moreover, swimming has had a very positive impact on my overall health, as I noticed that I started getting ill less frequently than most of my classmates. Nowadays, I still try to visit swimming pools when I have the opportunity. I will certainly try to instill the love to swimming into my children.
After graduation I already had a job offer on hands, but I was going to start working only in October. That left me with three to four months when I was completely free, so I decided to try myself as a day trader. In the first month I devoted all my free time to watching video seminars on how to trade, and did a lot of reading in parallel. I had a small amount of money I managed to save during the last year in the university, which allowed me to open up an account with a local broker and to start trading shares on NYSE and NASDAQ. As you might guess, two month of trading did not make me a millionaire. In fact, I lost around 30% of my small investment, but nevertheless I was glad that I tried it when there was a chance. After I started working, I never really had an opportunity to go back to day trading, since it requires a lot of time. That was a fascinating experience, and I am still keeping my eye on the news and reports about financial markets and commodities.
Essay 2 : In 500 words or less describe three things others do not know about you.
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Recently, around 3 months ago, I started keeping a diary. It began with writing down my short-term and long-term goals. Then I realized that I need to keep track of the progress I was making towards these goals. So I started making short notes about what I did each day to achieve any of the goals from my list. This practice has helped me to make sure that I don't waste my free time and that I spend it on something important. I have also realized that such small habits we develop throughout our lives, as keeping diary or doing sports, actually have a great impact on our personalities.
Another fact that others don't know about me is that I can swim one naval mile in less than 30 minutes. It all started when I was 14 years old. At that age I thought that I should pick a sport for myself, and I decided to start going to a swimming pool on a regular basis. Though it may sound as an ordinary decision, but it has drastically changed my appearance. My height was only 162 cm before I started swimming, but after only 4 months my height was already 181 cm, and my regular exercises in the swimming pool were the main factor behind that. Moreover, swimming has had a very positive impact on my overall health, as I noticed that I started getting ill less frequently than most of my classmates. Nowadays, I still try to visit swimming pools when I have the opportunity. I will certainly try to instill the love to swimming into my children.
After graduation I already had a job offer on hands, but I was going to start working only in October. That left me with three to four months when I was completely free, so I decided to try myself as a day trader. In the first month I devoted all my free time to watching video seminars on how to trade, and did a lot of reading in parallel. I had a small amount of money I managed to save during the last year in the university, which allowed me to open up an account with a local broker and to start trading shares on NYSE and NASDAQ. As you might guess, two month of trading did not make me a millionaire. In fact, I lost around 30% of my small investment, but nevertheless I was glad that I tried it when there was a chance. After I started working, I never really had an opportunity to go back to day trading, since it requires a lot of time. That was a fascinating experience, and I am still keeping my eye on the news and reports about financial markets and commodities.
