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CA 1000 Characters on Best Buddies - Syracuse and American University.



ChelseaSmart13 3 / 10  
Dec 31, 2012   #1
S.O.S. Only 150 words. Will happily help back.

Igniting a smile is remarkable. But, recognizing the impact that you are developing in someone's life is beyond words. Best Buddies granted me an opportunity to improve the life of a peer with disabilities through friendship. The connection that I formed drove my buddy to conquer his autism. I saw him bloom under our camaraderie. To see my actions produce such meaningful results was empowering. That friendship sparked my lifelong passion for connecting and serving people. That year, I vowed to broaden Best Buddies' impact to new heights. Under my leadership we were able to transform the lives of over 25 kids with disabilities in 2011. With our club at its greatest, I decided to stretch our outreach to our entire student body. In 2012 through our anti-bullying campaign, over 1,500 students took a pledged of respect. In 2013 we plan to broaden our impact to our community. If we can impact a person, a school and a community, who's to say it has to end there?

kukaxu 1 / 9  
Dec 31, 2012   #2
Igniting a smile is remarkable but, recognizing the impact that you are developing in someone's life is beyond words. i dont think the comma is needed here.

In 2012 our anti-bullying campaign entitled Spread the Word to End the Word, motivated 1,500 students to take our pledge of acceptance

comma after "2012", comma before"entitled"

Good luck. can you read mine ? thankyou :)
holmes01234 4 / 12  
Dec 31, 2012   #3
it seems like youre just listing off accomplishments. maybe you should write more about why helping all theses people appeals to you so much??
noneil 2 / 4  
Jan 1, 2013   #4
Short, sweet, and straight to the point!
Beautiful
Great job!
Best of luck to you
abulkhair37 8 / 22  
Jan 1, 2013   #5
In 2012 our anti-bullying campaign,

I would change it into In 2012, our anti-bullying campaign, and in the last sentence I would change who's into who is as it is more formal. Overall a Very Good answer though


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