we just got our social essays back and my main problem was i didnt have enough depth in mine. our teacher said if we wanted we could redo them but he would only exept them for marks if they were quite a bit better. help i dont get how to apply depth to my essay.
i need help with writing depth.
why do not you post your essay and let us check it?
... but he would only accept them for marks if they were quite a bit better.
Adding depth means you go a step further than just telling about the stuff. After you write about cultural differences between Latin American families and other cultural groups, for example, you have to dig deeper at the end of each paragraph. Well, not every paragraph, but a lot of them.
Each para should represent a single thought. That thought is worth explaining with a few sentences. The conclusion sentence of each paragraph can reflect on the point being made... it can challange the point you just made, consider alternatives, speculate about explanations... you can rant about it thoughtfully, as if you were interested in the subject. :-)
And write a few paragraphs where you compare the different ideas to one another. What do all these ideas mean together? Mix them up.
Adding depth means you go a step further than just telling about the stuff. After you write about cultural differences between Latin American families and other cultural groups, for example, you have to dig deeper at the end of each paragraph. Well, not every paragraph, but a lot of them.
Each para should represent a single thought. That thought is worth explaining with a few sentences. The conclusion sentence of each paragraph can reflect on the point being made... it can challange the point you just made, consider alternatives, speculate about explanations... you can rant about it thoughtfully, as if you were interested in the subject. :-)
And write a few paragraphs where you compare the different ideas to one another. What do all these ideas mean together? Mix them up.
