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yee   
Dec 24, 2008
Undergraduate / Pitzer Supplement-I want to change the world! [12]

To me, Pitzer is like a blank canvas. Across this canvas, students mix and spill their own colors and styles, hoping to create a meaningful portrait. Some succeed while others fail, but the result is unimportant because they have created colors of their own the process. These revolutionary colors represent the people they meet, the classes they take and the knowledge they share with others. Then, with their portrait in hand, they venture out into the world. Soon enough, the world becomes their canvas and Pitzer begins to represent the small scale model of the bigger portrait (the world). Exciting as this may seem, I do not want to get ahead of myself, so, let us begin the rough draft of my Pitzer portrait.

Obama's vision of purple is unity. My vision of purple is Han. Red signifies my fiery passions and blue represents my ambitions to make the world a better place. Just as red or blue alone cannot make purple, I cannot be who I am with passion or ambition alone. My passion to become a psychologist is largely supported by my ambition to better understand the world of autism. Over the years, our nation has become both fascinated and traumatized by the affects of autism. It has led even the brightest of psychologists into dead end corners and paths going to nowhere. More importantly, autism has become a heartbreaking reality for thousands upon thousands of parents across the nation. The dark clouds of autism have definitely casted their shadows upon many and I feel it is my duty to let the sun shine proudly through these menacing clouds. Though I have worked closely with an Asperger's Syndrome patient (Asperger's is a milder form of autism), I know that there is still a lot more for me to learn in the field of psychology and the topic of autism. I believe I will have the best opportunity to do so at Pitzer where I can join Professor Tsujimoto in his Abnormal Psychology class.

Culture is an intriguing aspect of psychology I am greatly fond of, which is why I created STRESS Club on my high school campus. I wished to address and formulate possible solutions to cultural flaws and extremes that plagued the lives of students like Virginia Tech student Cho Seung Hui and Troy alumnus, Azia Kim. Coming from a predominantly Asian school, my main focus was to eliminate the Asian belief that 'Ivy League=Success and Elsewhere=Failure'. Too many of my peers were being haunted by this mentality for me to just sit around and watch them suffer. I had to take a stance. My desire to understand different cultures for the sake of aiding fellow peers cannot be accepted (with normality) anywhere else but inside Pitzer's haven of superheroes.

In short, I want to drench my canvas in purple because purple is who I am; a passionate, ambitious Asian male whose social responsibility to help autistic patients bolsters his lifelong passion to become a psychologist.
yee   
Dec 24, 2008
Undergraduate / 'I began to finalize my own college list' - Why Carnegie? [12]

It's a good essay overall, very descriptive. Try naming a specific college or program that especially appeals to you. Naming some of those renowned professors you mention can't hurt. But the language and word usage is solid. Gluck!
yee   
Dec 24, 2008
Undergraduate / 'an elderly man singing' - Emory Supplement [7]

I'm not a great writer. I am often more confusing than clear. Any help will be greatly appreciated!

Many students decide to apply to Emory University based on our size, location, reputation, and yes, the weather. Besides these valid reasons as a possible college choice, why is Emory University a particularly good match for you?

Reading through countless brochures and meticulously analyzing Wikipedia entries for 'Emory University' left me unsatisfied. I already knew Emory was a ranked university with a fantastic business program and a location to die for. So what? This mold could fit ten or even twenty other undergraduate institutions across America. I remained hopeless until I fatefully stumbled upon twelve words that transformed my narrow view of Emory into a vast vision of opportunity.

You probably know these twelve words by heart: "To create, preserve, teach and apply knowledge in the service of humanity." This is the heartfelt mission statement that differentiates Emory from the rest. Moreover, this is the aspect of Emory that fits me in the same way black fits Dooley. Ever since sophomore year, I have been absolutely infatuated with the field of psychology; there is simply no other way to put it. Whether it is counseling adults twice my age via phone or teaching Taehwan (a teenager with Asperger's Syndrome) how to greet fellow peers, I have always been grateful for the chance to be a light in the lives of others. For the past two years, I have applied my knowledge the best I can, but there is still a lot of room for improvement. So, there would be no better place to improve and excel in my service to humanity than a university that prides itself on 'creating, preserving, teaching and applying knowledge in the service of humanity.' (I apologize for the slight tense change.)

Look, I enjoy nothing more than hearing an elderly man sing 'Good Rockin' Night' after a nice long talk on the phone...so, why stop now?

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