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Sep 19, 2016

Writing Feedback / IELTS Summary 8: Terri Trespicio-Stop searching for your passion [4]

Hai dila the arrange of your essay is pretty good
But i have idea to make a better
That is about: in essay is prohibited to use linked up word or sentence
For example : we dont need
The better :we do not need

Passion created by living it
To correct; the passion was created by living it
To Concern about passive voice
To solve whatever in front of us
To solve whatever in plain sight ,that is the same mening but more efficiently or collocater
To use about" THE" and without "It" is
THE used to use the word which is known previously
Witbout ""THE" used to use the word or sentence which is unknown yet
I think it all ,i hope it useful for you ...
Do more in order to be better

bismillah

Sep 19, 2016

Writing Feedback / In the 1841, some trains used a oil lamp with curved reflector [4]

IELTS SUMMARY MONTH; FIRST HEADLAMPS

Transportation is the one of crucial usable access in worldwide. There are numerous kind of public transportations are train,bus or similar of it.Specifically ,the progamable train progress is currently equipped by major firm .Time to time,for the past time up to now of example: in 1841 ,some trains used a oil lamp backed by curved reflector .So ,in 1841 ,the first electric headlamp was developed where it also being -increased rapidly

In beside of that,the train is able to be affordrable transportation and safier of big avenue of harmful accidental accident.To inhibit the myriad victims ,it equipped with a battery-powered electric headlamp

On several decades as we know that the train transportation is being developing significantly where the past time there was not a headlamp to be appeared headlamp .Subsequently, we will not predict the consecutive development of era that it would become what