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Aug 19, 2009
Undergraduate / Common Application Essay - What lead me to my goal? [24]
So i guess this fits under topic of choice. just grammer feedback or story feedback, ANY feedback would be appreciated. thank you.
PS; conclusion is bad, im a little stuck on it.
Pss:i dont know what to title this really
Ever since I was the age of six I have known that I was going to grow up to become a doctor. This is simply because I was informed at that age that doctor fit the requirements I had already set forth- to help people. As I left middle school I came to the conclusion that heart surgeon was the track to go down, and since then it has been the only profession that I see myself doing.
As a child I didn't grow up with all the things that some kids can take for granted. Dinner was usually potatoes and tuna with maybe beans on Friday, toys weren't abundant in my house, and my mom was busy most days working to support us so she couldn't play with us. One thing I did have however was television, every day I used to sit and watch things like X-Men and power rangers, how people who were different used what made them different or special to help people and make a difference. I wanted to be like them, I wanted to help, and people had already told me I was especially smart, so why shouldn't I use this specialness about me to help people? Thanks to my intelligence I already knew that there was no such thing as super powers and power rangers, but I also knew that I could still help people without them, I just had to find out how.
It used to bother me that my mother was unable to spend a lot of time with us, I wanted to talk with her and ask her things like how to help people without super powers and what she thought of my pictures, but it wasn't that bad since my sister took her place when she wasn't there. My sister would hear out my thoughts and help me sort out what I wanted, even though at that age all I knew was that I wanted to help people and make a difference, like Professor X in X men who took all mutant kids to his place to train them so they can help people. My sister told me of careers as a teacher or leader or politician, but none of this fit right to me, so she suggested other professions like lawyer or architect since I liked to draw and was good at arguing, and then doctor. I asked for details on them and how hard they would be, being a little kid a lot of work wasn't appealing to me, so she explained how difficult it would be and that the rewards were well worth the work and after a couple of minutes I decided that I would become a doctor.
Middle school was a tough time for me since I didn't fit in with most students. Back then most of the students wanted to be famous like P Diddy or Shaq, whereas I just wanted to be a doctor like the ones on the commercials happily helping the injured. When kids in my class knew all the new and "in" dance moves and song lyrics, I knew the precise moment to snap my fingers and sing along to the Addams family theme song, when parents didn't allow kids to go out they would lie or sneak out to hang with friends, while I would stay at home with my sister talking or trying to figure out the big words in stories I didn't understand. But when I was in eighth grade I had a wonderful English teacher who asked me one day which type of doctor I wanted to be, a surgeon or a diagnostic? I wasn't aware that there were different types so naturally I went home and asked my sister, she explained both types and what they do. Surgeons seemed more hands on so I picked that one; my sister also explained that you can specialize in a field and told me of heart surgeons and brain surgeons who were the hardest two. Brain surgery sounded cool and I did like the brain but I decided on the heart because I follow my head so much I thought I should follow a heart too sometimes.
Time has passed since those days yet my ultimate goal still stands tall. True other things have been flitting through my mind that do distract me from time to time, but its only fleeting, after all I have many more years to worry about finding my own Gomez Addams and having my own little Wednesday and Pugsley to take care of. Until those goals are reached I am happy to stay on the track to becoming a heart surgeon and helping people just like the heroes on television did.
So i guess this fits under topic of choice. just grammer feedback or story feedback, ANY feedback would be appreciated. thank you.
PS; conclusion is bad, im a little stuck on it.
Pss:i dont know what to title this really
Ever since I was the age of six I have known that I was going to grow up to become a doctor. This is simply because I was informed at that age that doctor fit the requirements I had already set forth- to help people. As I left middle school I came to the conclusion that heart surgeon was the track to go down, and since then it has been the only profession that I see myself doing.
As a child I didn't grow up with all the things that some kids can take for granted. Dinner was usually potatoes and tuna with maybe beans on Friday, toys weren't abundant in my house, and my mom was busy most days working to support us so she couldn't play with us. One thing I did have however was television, every day I used to sit and watch things like X-Men and power rangers, how people who were different used what made them different or special to help people and make a difference. I wanted to be like them, I wanted to help, and people had already told me I was especially smart, so why shouldn't I use this specialness about me to help people? Thanks to my intelligence I already knew that there was no such thing as super powers and power rangers, but I also knew that I could still help people without them, I just had to find out how.
It used to bother me that my mother was unable to spend a lot of time with us, I wanted to talk with her and ask her things like how to help people without super powers and what she thought of my pictures, but it wasn't that bad since my sister took her place when she wasn't there. My sister would hear out my thoughts and help me sort out what I wanted, even though at that age all I knew was that I wanted to help people and make a difference, like Professor X in X men who took all mutant kids to his place to train them so they can help people. My sister told me of careers as a teacher or leader or politician, but none of this fit right to me, so she suggested other professions like lawyer or architect since I liked to draw and was good at arguing, and then doctor. I asked for details on them and how hard they would be, being a little kid a lot of work wasn't appealing to me, so she explained how difficult it would be and that the rewards were well worth the work and after a couple of minutes I decided that I would become a doctor.
Middle school was a tough time for me since I didn't fit in with most students. Back then most of the students wanted to be famous like P Diddy or Shaq, whereas I just wanted to be a doctor like the ones on the commercials happily helping the injured. When kids in my class knew all the new and "in" dance moves and song lyrics, I knew the precise moment to snap my fingers and sing along to the Addams family theme song, when parents didn't allow kids to go out they would lie or sneak out to hang with friends, while I would stay at home with my sister talking or trying to figure out the big words in stories I didn't understand. But when I was in eighth grade I had a wonderful English teacher who asked me one day which type of doctor I wanted to be, a surgeon or a diagnostic? I wasn't aware that there were different types so naturally I went home and asked my sister, she explained both types and what they do. Surgeons seemed more hands on so I picked that one; my sister also explained that you can specialize in a field and told me of heart surgeons and brain surgeons who were the hardest two. Brain surgery sounded cool and I did like the brain but I decided on the heart because I follow my head so much I thought I should follow a heart too sometimes.
Time has passed since those days yet my ultimate goal still stands tall. True other things have been flitting through my mind that do distract me from time to time, but its only fleeting, after all I have many more years to worry about finding my own Gomez Addams and having my own little Wednesday and Pugsley to take care of. Until those goals are reached I am happy to stay on the track to becoming a heart surgeon and helping people just like the heroes on television did.