Writing Feedback / New Zealand: the cricket as a sport which attracted the smallest number of girls to involve in [6]

I am also interested in ilets and following up so many sources "we" language is not preffered so much.
you should avoid it and made it academic such as the figure shows, regarding the xxx rate, etc...

and overall is not a great start for the first paragraph you should describe the diagram and data briefly in by giving location and date

The chart below gives information about the most ...
The chart illustrates the information of the popular sports (x,y,x) played in New Zealand in 2002

Essays / I need to build a personal statement for a foreign Master scholarship [6]

1) describe your statements briefly give your schools grades, previous acihvements on sports or arts, and your economic condition. High school gartes will be a big leverage for you.

2) No idea to personal

3) ın my country x, as in many world countries bioenergy is a trend topic to study. İf I would have a chance to have this schollarship it will be a win win situation for both your university and my country.