Writing Feedback / The percentage of Australians from six different household types struggling with poverty in 1999 [2]

IELTS task 1 - Proportion of different categories of families living in poverty in Australia in 1999

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Poverty in Australian society

The given table illustrates the percentage of Australian from six different household types struggling with poverty in 1999. The data was measured in both percent and practical statistic.

It is noticeable in the last bold line that the number of poor Australian was really worth considering as it accounted for 11% of this country's population. Differed little from this, 933.000 people in couple-with-children families living below standard also made up 12% of their respective group. This record indicates that it is two times higher than 54.000 single aged individuals who suffered from financial problems.

As for aged couple, there was only 4% people living in poverty, thus the lowest position belongs to this group. In contrast, the quantity of poor Australian in sole-parent household category was the highest percentage (21%). This figure is 5 times higher than the lowest and clearly demonstrates the huge gap of economical statics between two kind of family, sole-parent and aged couple.

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Writing Feedback / IELTS task 1 - Reasons for study and the amount of employer support. [3]

The aim of study and a help from employer

The first given chart demonstrates the variation with age in two prominent study reasons namely career and interest while the second shows how much the amount of employer support affect their students.

Overall, a steady decrease of the career reason is revealed in the first graph. The survey found that 80% of under 26 years olds strongly focus on their future professions. It seems that the older people are, the more experience they gain and the less they are impacted by the career purposes. This figure, therefore, continuously declines and there is only 18% of people over 49 study for career as young generations.

In contrast, the interest reason increases stably with age. Only 10% of students under 26 assert interest as their main reason to study. Nevertheless, the percentage incessantly increases up to 40% when people reach at the age of 40 and surprisingly rocket by 70% in their late adulthood.

As for the employer support, the second graph shows noticeable differences in receiving employers' support among five groups. Approximately 60% of under 26 years olds, which is also the maximum rate, are assisted with time and fees by their employers. This rate gradually drops to 32% when people are 30-39 years old before rise up to about 44% in the late adulthood.

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