Writing Feedback / [IELTS] Brutality in the media makes people more aggresive? [5]

I'm also preparing ielts, so hope my comment is correct._(:⁍」∠)_

1
You replace people with humans or human beings.
human :belonging to or relating to people, especially as opposed to machines or animals .
human is not a good word there.

2
"Young people" is included in humans.

You may discuss the different effects on the youth and adults in two paragraphs, or effects on the public/younger people in one essay.
But not the same effect on young people and all the people, if they are affected in the same way, there is no need to paragraph.

.....hope to be helpful.

Writing Feedback / Why should women wear Ao dai at work ? [4]

Firstly , Ao dai refer to traditional Vietnamese women beauty .
women noun-beauty noun
the beauty of .....

refer to sb/sth phr v: to mention or speak about someone or something
You might use represent, stand for..