Writing Feedback / SAT essay, topic: Taking the responsibility [7]

Good attempt. However i find your use of the second world war as a case in point sort of out of place. maybe a more positive example would be more appropriate in my opinion.

best wishes all the same.

Scholarship / Chevening Scholarship - a launch pad for my career in cardiology [7]

@modewap
Thanks a lot. Maximum word count is 500 so I was tryn not to overshoot. I'll definitely need to work on my transition as you suggested. I was trying to work from the magnitude of the problem to Uk govts intervention in our health sector( I couldn't really get much by the way because their they focus mainly on terrorism and corruption).

I'll make corrections appropriately.

Scholarship / Chevening Scholarship - a launch pad for my career in cardiology [7]

@Modewap
Health care in Nigeria, which is a shared responsibility of the three tiers of government; i.e. federal, state and local, is beset with numerous challenges. Chief of these problems is the shortage of doctors to man the few and poorly equipped facilities available for citizens. A recent survey by the Nigerian Medical association puts the Doctor-patient ratio at 1:4250, a far cry from the 1: less than 600 recommended by the World Health Organisation. It is my view that to address the issue of manpower shortage we must first tackle the problem of 'brain drain' in this sector.

Interestingly, fostering Economic development and basic services in Nigeria is one of the headline deliverables of UK aid with the view of improving the lives of the most vulnerable in Nigeria, through job creation, better health care provision and education. The Department for International Development (DFID) leads the UK's global efforts in this regard, delivering the Sustainable Development goals (SDGs) and tackling a wide range of global developmental challenges.

My immediate plan after completion of the MSc Cardiac ultrasound/ Echocardiography would be to continue the journey towards becoming a specialist in Cardiology. I would want to establish my practice in a reputable tertiary hospital where I can teach medical students, interns and residents the basics and recent advances in the field of cardiology. Practicing in a tertiary centre will help broaden my knowledge and perspective in my field, open doors for interactions with professionals in other fields as well as give me the opportunity to engage in multidisciplinary research in cardiology specifically and Internal medicine generally. I intend to obtain a doctorate and apply myself to research; I hope to publish papers based on my research and work my way up to become a Professor of cardiology.

The chevening scholarship will serve as a launch pad for me, providing me with the needed international exposure in the UK, as I intend to come back to Nigeria to practice and teach. I realise that there is a great need in our health sector and I intend to take responsibility, play my role and train others just as I have been trained.

i hope this is better

Scholarship / Chevening Scholarship - a launch pad for my career in cardiology [7]

@Modewap
sorry its coming late, i'm new on this forum so just learning the ropes.
here's the prompt.

CAREER PLAN QUESTION
Chevening is looking for individuals who have a clear post-study career plan. Please outline your immediate plans upon returning home and your longer term career goals. You may wish to consider how these relate to what the UK government is doing in your country. (minimum word count: 100 words, maximum word count: 500 words)

Scholarship / Chevening Scholarship - a launch pad for my career in cardiology [7]

@Holt
thanks alot. i quite understand your point, and do realise that might be a weak point for my essay, i had tried looking for projects that will serve as a link tho, unfortunately DFID is more geared towards support for terrorism and the fight against corruption plus humanitarian aids fro IDPs. I'll keep searching. thanks a million.

Scholarship / Here is my essay`s answer for the leadership and influence for applying to a Chevening scholarship. [4]

@Nicola Ojena
i think you started very well in your first paragraph, however i think you sorta derailed from your second paragraph. the idea of the essay is to demonstrate your leadership abilities and how you have been able to influence your community positively.

goodluck.