Writing Feedback / CBEST. Television encourage or discourage learning - or does it do both depends on circumstances? [5]

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Television encourage or discourage learning. Or does it do both depends on circumstances?

Television effects on learning

The issue of television having positive or negative effects on learning is a controversial one. Some believe the television encourages learning through different educational channels and shows. Others believe the television discourages learning because the primary purpose of it is to entertain. After careful taught, I believe the television has a positive effect on learning because it informs, inspires and educates.

One reason for this belief is that TV informs us. Nowadays, when at least one TV is present in every house, it is very easy to be informed about current happenings all around the world. Just by watching news, we can learn about current events in politics, sports, economy, about the weather and natural catastrophes.

Another reason for this believe is inspiration that we can receive by watching this "magical box." Television can inspire and give different ideas to children and adults. Depends on the show that is being watched, TV can positively inspire every individual. By watching a cartoon a child can be inspired to be just as brave, polite, smart and helpful as his favorite character. An adult can be inspired with different kinds of ideas. For example, a person can decide what to cook for dinner, just by watching cooking channels.

The best reason for this belief is education. Children can learn their first words, colors, numbers, letters and shapes by watching educational shows. For some teenagers and students, it is easier to have a better understanding off of a matter if they visualize it. For example, students would learn better about historical events such as World War One, if they see a movie about it rather than just read about it.

In the final analysis, television is a tool that is available to many. With choosing the right channel and show one can learn, be inspired and educated. Let's not take it for granted!

Writing Feedback / CBEST defeated by rejection - a situation that has a powerful impact on my personality [2]

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defeated by rejection

An extraordinary situation that has a powerful impact on my personality occurred during the first year after I graduated. It was then that I was defeated by rejection.

After graduation, I was very excited to be able to find a job. I wasn't sure what kind of position I should search for, but I knew that I wanted to have a job that I will enjoy doing. Since I'm very sociable and a talkative person, I thought, a position of a receptionist would suit me well. Without second thought, I applied for an open position of a receptionist in one of the prestige hotels in my city. While waiting for an interview call, I was very excited and nervous. After a few days the manager of the hotel contacted me and we scheduled the interview.Enthusiastically I went to the hotel and had a pleasant professional conversation with the manager. After the interview I was very confident about securing this position for myself.

Soon, my optimism got crashed buy a voicemail from the manager's assistant stating that I was a very good potential candidate but that somebody else got the job." Maybe next time", she said before she ended the message. It is hard to explain how I felt. Not just that I was sad about being rejected but I was devastated, angry and disappointed at myself. A mix of negative emotions were surrounding me for days. After my mom noticed that this rejection defeated me more than it should, she started to encourage me to start looking for a job again. "What doesn't kill you, makes you stronger", she whispered while motivating me.

I started looking for open job positions but I wasn't as excited as I was the first time. With little hope I submitted my applications and soon enough I got a few interviews scheduled. This lifted my spirit but I didn't want to expect and hope for too much. Two days after the interview , while I ran my errands, a vibration of my phone interrupted me. It was a phone call from an airport supervisor. " Congratulations, you got the job", he explaimed and made me so happy. I called my mom and share the good news with her. I could tell from her voice, she was so proud of me.

Many people think of rejection as a negative experience. What we don't think of it is that every defeat makes us stronger and pushes us to accomplish or goals." What doesn't kill you, makes you stronger!", is a quote that you should remember next time you get defeated. It will help you keep going, trying and fighting to make your dreams and goals come true.