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Name: prathyusha Madhu
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polythurene   
Jul 29, 2018
Undergraduate / 'the cultures and traditions that co-exist with mine' - short essay on why I chose NYU [3]

hello!
this is my rough draft for the short essay 'why NYU', any feedback is appreciated

a constellation of hope nurturing brilliant stars



Education, in my opinion, is a subjective experience. You can make learning from laughter, pain, science or space and restricting yourself to a particular field without having the opportunity to experience different disciplines seems almost malevolent to me; which is why a liberal arts program is perfect.

Its multifarious courses allow for a wholesome development, enriching the required skills for the fast-paced world we live in. Taking NYU's study away program, for example, would allow me to wholly immerse myself in a completely foreign culture and adapt to their surroundings.

Moreover, NYUAD's diverse student body of more than 88 nationalities will open my mind and heart to the cultures and traditions that co-exist with mine; this is where diversity converges into unity.

NYUAD challenges students to evolve their thinking pattern to foster curiosity, creativity and critical reflection, this was evident when I leafed through past capstone projects of the various disciplines NYUAD accommodates. I was awe-struck at the immense learning possibilities NYUAD provides, and it doesn't end there. Learning at NYUAD as I have seen, is not limited to the end of the final year capstone project, it happens throughout every moment of the four years spent through discussions in tight-knit classrooms, outdoor activities involving teamwork and co-ordination, volunteer workshops such as GEN and SNAP and so on. Studying in an institution that mirrors my ideologies would be an unparalleled experience. It means being able to pursue courses that go beyond our everyday subject matter and more to the fundamentals of human behaviour, thus honing my skills as an individual who is empathetic and inquisitive.

NYUAD, if I would say, is a constellation of hope nurturing brilliant stars that will empower the future; it would be an honour to become a part of this distinct university.
polythurene   
Jul 29, 2018
Undergraduate / It is precisely the environment I would like to put myself in - admission essay __ WHY NYUAD? [3]

... of travelling and learning new languages are immense...
I have been a self-taught language learner since seven and..
... self-taught learner ever since the age ...[/R]
I yearn to immerse myself with extensive knowledge ... this sentence is a little off, in my opinion- try restructuring it
I am looking forward to further exploring my aptitude during the first year in NYUAD
tightly knitted
polythurene   
Aug 1, 2018
Undergraduate / 'the cultures and traditions that co-exist with mine' - short essay on why I chose NYU [3]

@Holt
i had a paragraph that talked about the courses i would like to pursue and what my future dream is, but i didn't know how it incorporate it into the passage without losing the flow.

this is the renewed version:

Education, in my opinion...

Its multifarious courses ...

Moreover, NYUAD's ...

I dream of one day starting my own educational institution in my home country that will serve as a platform to propel young, bright leaders to greater heights. NYUAD, will transform me into the best version of myself, equipping me to become a global leader who will not falter when faced with complex issues through a cumulative process mixing in voices from all across the world.

NYUAD challenges ... of human behaviour through courses such as "imagined cities" "lies and lying" and "laughter", thus honing my skills ...

NYUAD, if I would say...

(would this be okay or should i work on it more?)
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