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maya90   
Oct 15, 2018
Scholarship / ACTIVE MOBILITY. LEADERSHIP ESSAY. CHEVENING [3]

Hi Essay Forum Community! I hope you can help me review my Leadership Essay. Thank you in advance! MCTP

leadership relies on the relationships



Through experience, I have learned that working in the public sector is particularly defying. Several external circumstances can decide the success or failure of a project: limited administrative terms, political interests that differ from local needs, lack of synergy between government departments.

As I was appointed Project Manager of (Name of Town) Camina, I was aware of these challenges, as several of our proposals had been rejected in the past. From the beginning, I felt passionate about its transformative capabilities, and have worked for its success ever since.

(Name of Town) is a small town of 65.000 residents. 60% of its people walk as their primary means of transportation, through broken, narrow sidewalks, and streets filled with parked cars and motorcycles. (Name of Town) Camina aims to reshape the way streets are imagined, from vehicle-centered corridors to shared public spaces. This radical transformation of the town's way of moving presents significant demands for the community, the local administration, and the design team.

To achieve in a brief period of time, a project that acknowledges its context and receives approval by all reviewing departments, I have had to be a bold thinker and active leader. Managing a team through the redesign of 2.5 km of streets and leading primary communication with public agencies, requires efficacy; therefore, I proposed a design-research scheme that very much relied on inter-dependent work.

To start with, we determined a series of guidelines with our project's vision in mind and divided it into circuits. Each team member developed one circuit while researching and reading about a subject that they felt could nourish the design process. This allowed us to keep motivated at times when daily activities felt too repetitive or discouraging. During weekly team meetings, we discussed common difficulties and imagined possible strategies for them and shared our research and new acquired knowledge through open discussions on shared streets. This creative approach helped us shape the project's discourse while solving complex challenges in a collaborative and effective way. With such a well-informed vision, I presented our final proposal and positively influenced the decisions made by the city council, which had expressed reservations with the plan's scope and cost.

I believe my emotional resilience, mindfulness and social awareness were key to enable effective team actions and persuasive political outreach; which allowed us to accomplish an innovative mobility project for the Metropolitan Area. Today, after a lengthy process of design, socializing and debates, our plan has been approved and will start construction in the following months.

Through incredible difficulties and rewarding moments, I have learned leadership relies on the relationships you establish and cultivate with your collaborators; ultimately, they can shape circumstances and transform communities. I am certain the Chevening scholarship will allow me to learn from new people, encounter new ideas and further develop my leadership and influencing skills, helping me become an agent of change for my country.
maya90   
Oct 21, 2018
Scholarship / ACTIVE MOBILITY. LEADERSHIP ESSAY. CHEVENING [3]

Thank you so much, I really appreciate the help and time you give not me, but everyone else. I have been reading other essays and your comments, and I've been working on all my essays again. Hopefully, I will post them soon, and receive some more advice.

Have a good weekend!
maya90   
Oct 23, 2018
Scholarship / I am capable of taking control of any situation and lead a group of people into success. Chevening [3]

Hello Saihou, I am in the same process as you are at the moment, and I've read a number of essays on leadership and their corrections.

I am no expert, but I would tell you that right now, the structure of the essay is too compact. As there are no spaces or pauses, the essay is hard to read and it's not easy to keep track of the information you are trying to convey. And I think it's affecting your ability to see the essay as a whole. I would advise you to construct it from paragraphs and it will help you to better organize the information.

Regarding your leadership skills information, I think you would benefit from reading other essays and their feedback. They will greatly guide you through this process.

Right now I would say:
1. Don't mention your high school achievements, as they are too far back to be considered.
2. Choose one or two situations in a PROFESSIONAL EXPERIENCE, where you have demonstrated great leadership and influencing skills. Don't just talk about the qualities you have, but explain them using clear situations.

3. I would further develop the last Leadership example of "I work with a team of 14 who are all under my supervision whenever we travel to the field to collect samples and distribute medications to people in remote settings..." I think there is potential to explore there, and from everything I read, it is the one that demonstrates the most impact to your country, if you know who to present it.

4. "As the cases of certain ..." As I said before, I think you should develop your whole essay focused on this situation. If you explain more deeply this challenge and others you experienced and how you managed to overcome them, your essay will become more clear.

5. This sounds super harsh, but I would tell you to rewrite it. Don't try to edit it. There is too much going on. I think writing in a simpler, less elaborate manner will help you a lot. To improve the writing or to check for grammar, Grammarly is really good if you don't mind your content being used by others for free.

I am sure @holt will give you valuable feedback, but if not, this website has a lot of examples to read from.

I hope this helps! Good luck!
maya90   
Oct 23, 2018
Scholarship / Instrumentation and control engineering - Chevening leadership essay [4]

Hi Abdu.

I am in the same process as you are, so I am no expert. However, I have read a lot of essays and feedback in this forum and I recommend you do the same. It's really helpful.

So, having said that::
1. Don't repeat the information you have already said on your professional background and job duties. Delete the first paragraph, it is not necessary. Go straight to the point.

2. You have to really map out the Leadership and Influencing situation you are trying to tell. Right now from your essay, I understood you were part of a team, as you kept talking about WE.

3. I am sure if you lead the team through those difficult times, you had to take some measures to overcome them, right now, you are downplaying the challenges, and it is not helping your essay. You should better DESCRIBE the challenges, tell what STEPS you took to improve the situation, show a favorable OUTCOME.

4. As for influencing skills, read some essays and find common threads.

I really advise you to focus your essay on yourself, and not your coworkers, you have to sell your capabilities. This essay is not convincing of your skills and abilities.

Go back to the paper, and lay out what you want to say in each paragraph. Don't be too modest, we are competing with a lot of brilliant people!

I hope this helps! Good luck!
maya90   
Oct 23, 2018
Scholarship / CAREER PLAN IN URBAN PLANNING. CHEVENING. [2]

Hi Essay Forum Community! I hope you can help me review my Career Plan Essay. I truly appreciate all the feedback I have read! MCTP

exposure to British's planning approaches



Chevening is looking for individuals who have a clear post-study career plan. Please outline your immediate plans upon returning home and your longer-term career goals. You may wish to consider how these relate to what the UK government is doing in your country

Rapidly urbanization and motorization, low access to public transportation and displacement to country's the main urban areas, have pushed local government administrations to discuss their planning tools and propose projects that address such issues. Principal cities like A, B, and C have had the advantage of larger budgets and a concentration of skilled professionals. This, however, has not been the case for intermediate cities and towns, whose main priority has been to overcome pressing problems related to our internal 50-year conflict. Should I elaborate in the current climate, and post-conflict opportunities?

Upon my immediate return, I will set into practice my acquired knowledge and previous professional experience and assume an active role in Regional Planning Departments. The majority of these small municipalities must update, in the incoming years, the long-term vision of their Territorial Management Plans. This crucial opportunity presents itself every 12 years and is of immense importance due to the enormous urban pressure these territories are facing. I plan on joining forces with regional governments to ensure the inclusion of innovative and sustainable mobility scenarios and policies, which prioritize pedestrians and cyclists in their vision.

I am confident the experience of working for local and regional planning departments and the rigorous education from a UK leading master program, will provide me a broader understanding of Country's diverse realities and support my transition into more prominent roles at the national level.

My long-term goal is to work at the Ministry of Housing, Cities, and Territory, where the government will be creating a dedicated Vice-ministry of Cities. I believe it is crucial to the planning and development of the country, to an of and that is human-centered and pedestrian-scaled. As part of this division, I wish to shape and direct nationwide mobility initiatives and campaign for bike-pedestrian safety. Helping conceive planning policies that carefully consider all transportation modes will provide the necessary tools for local administrations to advance transit-oriented projects.

The Ministries of Housing and Transportation have frequently lacked synergy, yet better interactions could provide a broader impact on the national level. With my acquired knowledge in both Urban and Transport Planning, I hope to act as a liaison facilitating coordination across institutions and establishing more cohesive, inclusive and sustainable approaches to development.

My future professional motivations significantly coincide with the objectives of the UK Prosperity Fund for Country, which aims to support economic growth in post-conflict affected areas of the country. To achieve this goal, the fund promotes multi-modal transport planning, sustainable urban development, and human capital improvement for better governability, both on the national and regional scale. As the UK is the third largest investor in the country, it is of great interest to Country, that the financing and technical assistance substantially impact our communities. I hope the exposure to the Chevening community and British's planning approaches, will allow me to effectively support UK's efforts towards livable and equitable territories in Country. (474 words)
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