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Posts by toannguyenduc
Name: Nguyen Duc Toan
Joined: Apr 19, 2019
Last Post: May 2, 2019
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From: Vietnam
School: Hanoi Medical University

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toannguyenduc   
Apr 19, 2019
Writing Feedback / Hard Work vs Luck - what determines people's success? [5]

What Is The Ultimate Key To Success In Life?



Hard work is very important in our life. Some people argue that luck plays no role for success of people. In my opinion, hard work is necessary but people can reach success more quickly if they have luck.

On the one hand, hard work is an essential quality to successful people working in any fields. Hard work enables us to gain essential knowledge, skills and experiences required in our life. For instance, those who want to become a good doctor must take a lot of time and effort to learn medical knowledge and practice clinical skills in medical schools. My brother has made great efforts for over 10 years, reading lots of textbooks and overcoming numerous examinations to become a surgeon.

However, we can reach our goals more easily if we have luck. Luck facilitates us the realization of plans, enabling us to reach our goals and objectives in a shorter period of time. Five years ago, my father's company specializing in manufacturing organic products was at the verge of bankruptcy due to low demand in domestic market. Fortunately, the company overcame the crisis thanks to timely support from the government, promoting export organic products to foreign markets. It is obvious that hard work accompany with luck may bring us to new horizons.

However, it is no good to rely entirely on luck. Luck is only a catalyst to promote hard-working people reach their goal quickly. If luck is not accompanied with knowledge, skills and experiences gained from hard labor, opportunities will certainly be wasted regrettably. Story of my uncle is a classic example. He is a farmer and an alcohol addict. One year ago, he won the lottery with large amount of money but then he mainly invested in alcohol and drugs and now he return to poor person.

In conclusion, for all of the reasons above, I believe that both hard work and luck play important role in success of any people.
toannguyenduc   
May 2, 2019
Writing Feedback / Ielts-Writing-Task2-divorce rates skyrocketing recently [4]

Firstly, I think you need to improve your grammar. For example: in the thesis statement, you can say: "In my opinion, I will point out several reasons causing this problem and give some solutions to improve the status".

Secondly, in the second paragraph, it is necessary to put a clear topic sentence to attract readers. You can say: "I think there are some reasons that are attributed to high divorce proportion in recent years. The first reason is that ...." And you should give some more reason to make your essay more persuasive.
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