Undergraduate / I am very dedicated to pursuing a career in computer science and Engineering; personal statement [4]

It was 2017, when I had an opportunity to take part in ''personal strategicplanning'' training in my university
I have never thought it will be a critical point in my life from which everything flows even to today. But it was.

Essays / Why schools should embrace technology more - writers block / intro paragraph? [2]

tech is our future...careers are beginning to rely more on it....something along those lines

i cant write it for you!

Scholarship / Business administration major - I'm planning apply for KGSP 2020 scholarship [3]

just a little rewording

Since the time I firstaspired to become a successful entrepreneur in the future, I have been planned every little step that I need to take is necessary to achieve my dream. My future plans after I graduated graduate with a bachelor degree

Research Papers / Cultural Differences Between America and Japan [2]

very nicely written! i like thhe way u broke up paragrpahs to make a strong clear statment.

Writing Feedback / What is the difference between work and fun? [4]

But first, let me clarify what work really is. It's It is an activity involving mental or physical effort done performed in order to achieve a purpose or result. First, it implies......

you wrote "first" twice before moving on to "second"........maybe change that

Writing Feedback / The birth, death and the population growths of Scotland in 1940 with projection towards 2020 [4]

The most prominent feature was is that the country's population was on the steady decline steadily declined since 1955, and then it stopped growing all together by around the mid 2000s.

Scholarship / QuestBridge National College Match Biographical Essay: D&D, Financial Struggles, Support Systems [5]

this is really good and i could nt find anything to point out as a mistake!
i am applying as well but i havent had anyone read mine over.