Posts by supadupaman7

supadupaman7

Oct 11, 2009

Faq, Help / Is it safe to post my essay here? Or should I be worried about Plagiarism? [175]

Is it safe to post?

Hey I am just wondering how safe posting one's essay on this site is. I would like to get some critiques of my own essays but was wondering what prevents other visitors from copying and pasting essays off this site. Some students might pass these essays off as their own and If colleges you software such as turnitin.com to check the validity you might run into problems when submitting your own essays. I'm not saying that people here are dishonest because I truly believe 99% of the visitors want to offer their help, its just the other 1% I am suspicious about.

Thanks

supadupaman7

Oct 18, 2009

Undergraduate / 'Live music' - Common app short answer - piano [7]

I think that you have done a great job with having a 150 word limit. You make the essay personal and you makes these emotion identifiable for people who might not play the piano. great job.

supadupaman7

Oct 18, 2009

Undergraduate / "leaving the gym after a solid workout" - common app short answer critique [4]

I think that your updated version more closely resembles your second essay (just on observation). You have struck a good balance between your own characteristics (i.e. dedication) and passions. Maybe you can change the end up a little bit and add how you want to continue growing both physically and mentally. just a suggestion.

supadupaman7

Oct 23, 2009

Undergraduate / Common App Essay: Issue which affects you (My competitors) [3]

I think that this is a very important issue and you illustrated its gravity well in your essay. I would suggest that you talk about how you think these gaps can be bridged, not only for yourself, but for the millions of other Americans in the public schooling system. With a few minor tweaks you've got a superb essay.

supadupaman7

Oct 23, 2009

Undergraduate / Comm App Short Activity Essay- "Endure the Storm" [5]

This is a rough draft. I am wondering if the essay flows well and I'm not sure about the last sentence. Does it focus enough on myself? Any comments or critiques would be greatly appreciated.

Prompt: Please elaborate on one of your activities (extracurricular, personal activities, or work experience)(150 words or fewer).

"If you wish to see the rainbow you must first endure the storm"; While I may not be able to link this quote to its original orator, I suspect that individual was a cross country runner. In no other sport do competitors willfully subject themselves to the fatigue, anxiety, and pain associated with a three-mile race. The whirlwind of this distant storm is initially felt during blazing summer practices and slowly evolves into a blitzkrieg sweat and oxygen indebted lungs by the first race. The rainbow is representative of the unrivaled feelings of personal pride and accomplishment invoked by crossing the finish line. Although the idea of work and reward is exemplified through my sport, it is a universal message. Excellent grades are not a product of single bursts of enthusiasm and moral fiber isn't strengthened by periodic acts of benevolence. Many endeavors prove neither easy nor provide instant gratification, but through tenacity I strive to obtain greater rewards.

R Clark