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Name: Catherine Heffley
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Catherine_11   
Apr 18, 2020
Writing Feedback / Preservation of tradition - IELTS argumentative essay [2]

traditional ways of life



With the development of morden society is the loss of traditional ways of life
Is it important to keep our traditional ways of life?
How can this be achieved


In this day and age, with the development of society, many nations around the world are coping with the problem of losing the customary ways of life. This essay will argue that it is essential to keep traditional values and these traditions will be achieved by many ways if people take this into consideration by the two main reasons.

First of all, traditional ways of life represent unique features of every couyntry in the world. We bring these traditions to all over the globe, introduce our own characteristics such as table manners and greetings. This will make people understand more about the country and as a result, it becomes famous. For example, if we see a person of a family celebrate the Lunar New Year, you will guess they are Asians.

Secondly, to educate people about traditions is to preserve the old ways of life. We will help people raise awareness about the loss of the traditions and suggest them the solutions. By this way, we will educate the people, especially the young generations, who are now tired of learning about the folklore and tend to catch up with the morden world. For instance, schools or parents should take the youths go to the national museum to discover everything about the ancient ancestors.

In conclusion, the preservation of tradition shuold be highly noticed by many people and we shuold act now to keep these old values alive.
Catherine_11   
Aug 25, 2020
Writing Feedback / IELTS Writing Taks 2: Having same opinion as friends [4]

Hi,
I've read you essay and I think your content and the examples are good. However, there are some mistakes I've found out:
+ "On the other hand"
+ " I would argue that it is better to ... -> this is your orient, why do you write '' look at both arguments and conclude that various opinions would have more positives on friendship.

+ I can't understand this sentence" working on them together." -> I think just '' working together"
These are my opinion. Have a good day!
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