Writing Feedback / The chart shows the sales revenue in dollars at three branches of a bank in the first quarter - 2000 [3]

IELTS WRITING TASK 1 BAR CHART

The chart below shows the sales revenue in dollars at three branches of a bank in the first quarter of 2010

The bar chart compares the number of turnovers in dollar of three different bank branches in the first three months of 2010

Overall, with the exception of Seaford bank, two other ones managed successfully to raise their sale revenues with the more pronounced increase being seen in the Brighton branch.

As can be seen from the chart, Brighton bank 's earnings stood at nearly 25,000 dollars in January prior to a sudden drop to around 15,000 dollars, which was lower than Newhaven branch with 20,000 dollars in February. However, Brighton bank made an unexpected recovery by skyrocketing its income to 40,000 dollars, which was the highest revenue among the three branches, a month later. Similarly, Newhaven bank's turnover went up to precisely 35,000 dollars in the same given month.

In contrast, a reverse trend was seen in the Seaford branch's revenue. This bank stood at nearly 15,000 dollars revenues before gaining 12,000 dollars, around 27,000 dollars, to become the most profited one in February. However, a remarkable fall to 11,000 dollars in its earning was recorded, resulting in its turnovers being the extremely lower compared to two other banks in the next month.

p/s: wish can get a lot of comments from all of you. I'm a newbie to ielts so please, don't judge me too hard.

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Writing Feedback / The pie charts compare the amount of energy taken from five different sources in the US (1980-1990) [4]

TASK 1: Source of energy in the USA in 1980 and 1990

The pie charts compare the amount of energy taken from five different sources in the US between 1980 and 1990.

Overall, varied fluctuations were occurring in the proportion of these fuel sources over the given time. However, oil remained as the biggest energy provider, while power from the water was little exploited over the course of 10 years.

In 1980, oil accounted for nearly half of the national energy prior to suddenly dropping by 8%, at 33%, in the next years, yet played as the preferred power of all. Sharing the same pattern, the proportion of energy coming from natural gas dropped slightly, from 26% in 1980 to 25% in 1990. Meanwhile, hydroelectric power remained unchanged during the timescale, accounting for only one-twentieth of the total energy.

Conversely, a noticeable increase was recorded in both nuclear and coal power. Starting off at 22%, the percentage of energy generated from coal rose up to 27%, overtaking that of natural gas to be the second-highest in 1990. Remarkably, the amount of nuclear power grew twofold ten years later with the initial number being the same as hydroelectric power, at 5%.

p/s: I challenged myself with pie chart this time. Hope to hear from all of you.

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