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Aug 11, 2020
Writing Feedback / Writing task 2: Argument essay (Food and Diet) [4]
all of the points that i mention below are just my two cents anyway. if something is wrong, please correct me.
... could do a lot of harm to our health.
muscle system-> muscular system
You can use these collocations alternatively:
keep their health in good condition -> keep them in the pink of health
... meat is necessary for our meals-> for our daily portions
many people could easily lose their weight by ... -> shed a few pounds
that lack could cause ... -> that deficit
Hope that you will accomplish what you are aiming for
all of the points that i mention below are just my two cents anyway. if something is wrong, please correct me.
... could do a lot of harm to our health.
muscle system-> muscular system
You can use these collocations alternatively:
keep their health in good condition -> keep them in the pink of health
... meat is necessary for our meals-> for our daily portions
many people could easily lose their weight by ... -> shed a few pounds
that lack could cause ... -> that deficit
Hope that you will accomplish what you are aiming for