Writing Feedback / Ielts Task 1 - nutrients in breakfast, lunch, dinner and snacks - Chart comparison [4]

summarise information from the charts

The three circular charts illustrated the proportion of three types of nutrients in breakfast, lunch, dinner and snacks. The data was collected from typical meals in the USA. Overall, the percentages of sodium and saturated fat were seen to be the largest in the dinner meal which were 43% and 37% respectively, while added sugar made up the largest proportion in snacks (42%)

To be more detailed, the proportions of sodium and saturated fat were quite similar. The second largest proportions of these two types of nutrients were in lunch which were 29% of sodium and 26% of saturated fat, while the proportions in breakfast were the smallest which were 14% of sodium and 16% of saturated fat.

However, the chart of added sugar showed a different pattern. It can be told from the chart that dinner contained the second largest amount of added sugar. Meanwhile, the percentage of added sugar in breakfast and lunch did not have much difference: 16% of sugar in breakfast and 19% of sugar in lunch resulted in just a 3% gap.

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Writing Feedback / Ielts Task 2 - Owning or renting a home [2]

The decision on owning a home rather than renting one

In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or a negative situation?

It is believed in several nations that renting a home is not as important as owning one. Reasons behind this belief can be traced down to several. However, whichever reason it is, this situation can be either positive or negative.

One of the reasons can be the concept of a home has a very special meaning to many communities around the globe. Under one roof, family members, from the older generations to the younger generations, share the memories and help the younger grow. In some cultures, owning a home and having several generations living there is a sentimental belief, as memories fill every place in the home.

Owning a home may bring benefits, especially for the mental purposes. Having a stable place to live means that people do not have to worry about the possibility that the landlord asks them to move out. With that relieved thought, they consider home as a place to release stress and escape from the busty city. Another pro of owning a home can be the creating a happier and more fulfilled childhood for the children. Moving away a lot can cast doubt on a child's thought of what truly a home is.

However, there are certain types of people who are not comfortable with buying and owning a home. Young students after graduating from university tend to rent an apartment or share a house with others as they have not made enough money to buy a house. Internship and jobs can last for just a period of time so they jump from company to company. Many even enjoy traveling and exploring various new cities. Thus they just stay in one place and then fly to the others. It can be said that renting a home would be a more preferable choice for them.

In conclusion, there are a number of reasons leading to one's decision on owning a home rather than renting one. However, depending on each person's lifestyle and life purpose, both owning and renting a house can bring benefits and drawbacks.

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