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Name: Linh Nguyen (Lorena)
Joined: Aug 2, 2021
Last Post: Aug 3, 2021
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linh_nguyen90   
Aug 2, 2021
Writing Feedback / Discovering the stories and facts connected to the house or the building in which we reside [3]

IELTS Writing Task 2:
In some countries, more and more people are becoming interested in finding out about the history of the house or building they live in.

What are the reasons for this? How can people research this?



Answer:

People in certain nations are getting more keen on discovering the stories and facts connected to the house or the building in which they reside. I assume that this trend happens more in the cases of ancient houses and areas that have a history. Firstly this essay will discuss what motivates people to make research, and secondly, how information can be figured out.

There are several reasons that encourage people to do research. Some people take it serious to know the past of the place where they live because they will feel more connected to it. The story behind a house or a building can make people living in it feel proud, therefore using it to boast in a random conversation with friends. Finding facts about something also provide a chance to learn new things. For example, architect enthusiasts can study the house's ancient architectural style and the construction techniques that keep it standing through decades, or even centuries.

Looking for information about the past of a certain construction is not as difficult as we may think. Data can be found in existing researches and related newspaper articles. The Internet now enables us to easily access such information with just a click at home without having to immerse ourselves in books and materials at libraries. Talking with the neighborhood can also be an effective way. The neighbors that have been living in the area for a long time can be the most lively books and may tell stories that cannot be found anywhere else.

In conclusion, researching the history behind a resident site can be amused to many individuals and the facts are approachable in different ways.
linh_nguyen90   
Aug 3, 2021
Writing Feedback / Adults continue to live with parents after they graduated [4]

I suggest some changes in bold as below. Hope this help:

[i... having their own lives, even aftergraduating and getting well-paying jobs.

On one hand, it is undeniable that adults...

... financial budget that will cover various costs such as rent, personal activities, and food if they have their own lives.

... all the time looking for opportunities to

Consequently, those people living with parents will be more convenient than those who don't.

... living with parents while working also has some drawbacks.[/i]
linh_nguyen90   
Aug 3, 2021
Writing Feedback / The debate about giving rewards to exceptional students or well-advanced ones [2]

IELTS Writing Task 2:
Some people think that schools should reward students with the best academic results, while others believe it is more important to reward students who show improvements.


Discuss both views and give your opinion.



It is debatable whether rewards should be given to learners that achieve high distinction scores or to those who prove self-advancement. It is agreed that schools should motivate all kinds of students' efforts and achievements; however, the top-grade students deserve to be recognized with rewards. This essay will delve into both points of view before coming to a reasoned conclusion.

Rewarding outstanding students is reasonable in many ways. It has become a tradition throughout the history of mankind, ever since the initial forms of school existed; in other words, it has been proved to be an advantageous activity by generations. If we see closer to sports tournaments that have similar mechanisms to academic competence, only top-ranked participants will get the prizes. The rewards, which normally come in the form of scholarships, do not signify recognition but also support for talents to move forward with higher education. For example in Vietnam, students will have chances to study in any university of their choice in return for obtaining high distinction results in the National Excellent Student Contest.

However, taking a look at the other viewpoint, the importance of recognizing students with great improvements is undeniable. From the perspective of human psychology, acknowledgment plays the role of critical encouragement in one's self-development. Well-motivated learners will keep striving and continuously break their own records. Despite this, educators might not be able to handle the possibility of granting prizes to a large number of students with good scholastic progress. To illustrate, if the whole class of 30 students made higher scores than before, there would not be sufficient rewards for all of them.

The debate about giving rewards to exceptional students or well-advanced ones has not yet come to an end. Even though it is significant to acknowledge any efforts in self-improvement, those with high academic results should still be awarded.

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Note: Please give feedback on this writing. What band score I can get and how can I improve it? Thank you!
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