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Posts by Iris HSIEH
Name: Iris HSIEH
Joined: Mar 22, 2022
Last Post: Oct 8, 2022
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From: 台灣
School: NTUA

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Iris HSIEH   
Mar 22, 2022
Writing Feedback / Some people think that intelligence is innate while others claim that we can improve it by learning [2]

Task 2:
Some people think that intelligence is innate while others think that we can improve our intelligence through learning.

Discuss both sides and give your opinion.



Genius is either born in nature or can be trained is a contradictory problem. Some believe that the talent is a gift from the god while others believe that intelligence is a lifelong accumulation of learning. I support that people are able to level up their smartness, given that in most cases, the potentials can be nourished through learning.

Intelligence is a capacity that how people tackle with the amount of knowledge to apply in specific fields, therefore it probably borns with a higher level than average people but hard to upgrade without learning. In society, people admire someone with high intelligence quality because those people are keen on study and always are fast -learners than others. As the world famous inventor Edison said, "A genius is composed of 1% talent and 99% efforts". That is, person with outstanding ability are consider to be diligent and willing to find their potentials in progress.

On the contrary, some people assert that intelligence is a gift from the god and everyone's talents are determined by biological results since we are passed down genes from our ancestors. Innate capacity for humans are a strength since smarter people owns more space in their brains that means they are more likely to memorise more than others.

It is fair to say that people have excellent nature are more likely to own more chance to maintain their talents, and that is why the social classes are hard to be breakdown when the elite have absolutely benefits than commons.

In conclusion, both sides of how intelligence develops states different angle of people judge elites. In my view, life is a long run, the innate capacity gives different begins to everyone. When normal people embrace their own talents, it must be a second chance to improve their intelligence on the roads.
Iris HSIEH   
Oct 8, 2022
Writing Feedback / IELTS WRITING TASK 2: ONLINE COURSES NEVER BE AS GOOD AS IN-PERSON COURSES [3]

The first paragraph is not clear and misleading. To paraphrase the question as the topic sentence will be better.
Suggestions, when developing the reasons to support your view points. Try to briefly mention in the first paragraph.
" I strongly agree with this statement for several reasons." When read this sentence, the audience hardly expect the following development in the essay.
Iris HSIEH   
Oct 8, 2022
Writing Feedback / IELTS writing task 1 with a line graph about carbon dioxide emission [3]

This essay can not see the clear analysis or outlines of the graph,
maybe because it is too detailed for the numbers but lose focus on the explanation and result.
some pronoun misleads the reading comprehension, such as the former, the latter.
Iris HSIEH   
Oct 8, 2022
Writing Feedback / IELTS Writing Task 2: Is the Internet "Making Us Stupid"? [2]

Is the Internet "Making Us Stupid"?


Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Write at least 250 words.


Nowadays, it is possible for people to go out without cellphones. The internet makes our life easier and more convenient in every simple task, such as finding ways, reserving a table and even seeing a doctor. That is, people rely on their smartphones to solve most of the problems in living than in the past days. It is obvious that the internet makes us smarter but also degrades our independent thinking in the long term.

The curiosity is decreased by the online packaged information, when people are getting used to looking for the answer on the searching engine website. It is common that all we need information can be found on the internet, with the anonymous author, social media or business campaigns; however, it doesn't mean those contents are correct. By knowing these information with a simple click on the phone, it is efficient and fast to learn but no one will spend time solving the real problems simultaneously. That is, the process of finding solutions may be ignored. Although the internet provides accessible information, it actually harms the brainstorming process.

Misleading information leads to the crisis of critical thinking in every aspect of life. Everyone knows the online resource varies thoughts in our minds; nevertheless the exposure of messages changes our conception and norms. For instance, the news of the election for city mayors in 2018, the candidate of Taipei city mayor used strategies on social media to win the support of the young generation. In that period of time, people see all the advertising, policy discussion and videos covered with hopeful impressions, gradually lose their own viewpoints. The internet accelerated the message spreading and leads to a kind of brainwashing easily than the traditional marketing method. Therefore the misleading messages online makes people have difficulties in distinguish the accuracy and ambiguity, the influential impression planted in our mind become stereotype in the future.

In conclusion, the disadvantage of the internet outweighs the benefits for our human intelligence. While people have no interests in finding new ideas in life, it is hard to say the society can be improved in the near future. Also, the media exposure conveys the phenomenon of whether the audience needs to choose information or not by critical thinking.
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