Writing Feedback / Writing Task 2 - Problem and Solution - Young people live in major cities. [2]

As major cities in the world are growing today, so do their problems.

What are the problems for young people who are living in the cities as the result of continued growth? What are the solutions for these problems?

It is common these days for young dwellers, particularly those living in metropolitan areas, to overcome plenty of issues. This tendency leads to the youngster in such areas experiencing some mental health problems and an increasing unemployment rate. However, each school and individual can take to address these problems.

Some young people will have some mental health problems when live in urban cities. The people who in rural areas want to pursue higher education or work in urban cities so they may live alone in strange places. Therefore youngsters may experience feelings of loneliness, isolation and worry. In addition, young people could bear the weight of paying all household bills and responsibilities because of the higher cost of living but miss out on emotional support from families or companions. These can contribute to being linked to mental health and other health problems.

Regarding fresh graduates, ones can meet difficulties in seeking a decent job without experience and facing intensive competitiveness. Others struggle with working in a professional work environment where never exposure before. This can result in an increasing natural unemployment rate which deprives (the) economy.

These problems can be tackled by two measures. Considering the first issue, there is a need for young people to take part in extracurricular activities to widen ones' network and horizons. Another measure that young people should stay connected on social media is by joining social platforms which connect strangers and share photos and stories, such as Omegle, Facebook, Tinder, etc. The second problem can be addressed thanks to schools. With organizing practical training classes in public. In this sense, final-year students can get exposure to teachers with practical experiences. These facilities to children have an overview in reality.

In conclusion, although the trend towards constant development in metropolitans leads to posing a threat to young people's mental health and job prospects. It is essential for each individual to keep up with other on social platform. There is a need for schools to arrange a practical classes for senior students.

Writing Feedback / IELTS WRITING TAK 2: Replace parks and gardens instead of apartment buildings. Discuss both views. [2]

Some people think that the best way to reduce the time spent in travelling to work is to replace parks and gardens close to the city center with buildings apartments for commuters, but others disagree.

Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

People hold different views about whether authorities should dismantle parks and gardens by apartment buildings. While in some way, it might seem reasonable to maintain those in downtown. I personally believe that those places are essential for inhabitants.

There are several reasons why people might argue that governments should construct more apartment buildings. Firstly, parks and gardens occupy a lot of areas which leads to some people living far from the city center will spend more time traveling to work. For example, people living in extramural areas will have a longer distance to go to work than those living in the city center. Secondly, it might be supposed that those places may be useless because of not being association with economic development.

However, I would agree with those who believe that the government should not construct apartment buildings instead of parks and gardens. The main benefit of those places is that they increase air quality, which contributes to maintaining good mental health for citizens. This is particularly the case for those who go to parks or gardens on a regular basis, and they will find a sense of relaxation because they can be close to nature and relieve stress. Besides, trees in gardens and parks also facilitate an increase in the fresh air in the atmosphere.

In conclusion, while there may be benefits to constructing more apartment buildings for commuters. However, I believe that keeping parks and gardens in the city center will have more advantages to outweigh the disadvantages in the long-term.