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anmolwrites   
Jun 14, 2022
Writing Feedback / Technology has made man dumb [4]

Some people believe that technology has made life lazy and lethargic while proponents argue that it has made life easy and active.

Discuss both sides and give your mild opinion.



Technology has become the essential part of everybody life. Almost everyone has become accustomed to its advantages and efficiency. It is evident that technology has made man's life efficient and less laborious. There is no field in life which has not been benefited from technology, be it science, medicine, electronics or art etc. In science, the advance methods of procedures such as laser and chemotherapy; In electronics, the new AI devices, In IT, social media apps such as Instagram and Facebook really opened new doors for communication and entertainment. From the fans on our heads to the mobile phones in our hands, all became possible thanks to the ever-growing progression in technology.

On one side, many people believe that the rise in the popularity and usage of technology advances several new problems. For instance, most technological devices such as AI vacuums, sensor and automation devices has made life less active and reduced the physical activity of man to the lowest. According to many social media apps such as Facebook, Instagram, Twitter etc. young individuals suffers from mental health problems e.g. Depression, Anxiety. These problems are all valid but not insolvable, using mobile phones moderately and taking care of one's physical health are all essential for better mental and physical health.

On the other hand, proponents believe that technology has made life easier and less complicated. Instant connections to friends and family has human feel connected and content. Social media apps like Facebook and Skype has made possible the immediate connections with faraway and abroad relatives and family. Online shopping has changed the world of economics and fast delivery services reduced the burden of commuting here and there. You can buy anything and everything from online shopping from dressing tables, electronics to grocery and medicines etc. New and less painful procedures of surgery, advance drugs, laser treatment and advance machinery, all of these were only possible because of technology.

New and innovative solutions have not only provided comfort and efficiency but it has also created a new world for job markets as Freelancing is one of the top industry in the world right now. It provides job opportunities to anyone who has any type of skill so they sell their services from the comfort of their own homes regardless of their country and habitat place. Technology has forever changed the Entertainment Industry after the explosion in the popularity of YouTube, now every kind of entertainment; International or local, is Free and on the tip of the finger of the people.

However, I believe that technology is a growing power that can improve the quality of life of humans. Our life wouldn't be this easy and efficient had it not been because of technology. Technology not only helps us in finding convenient and fast solutions but it also helps in eradicating many serious problems that are threatening to the Humanity. As it constantly improving and developing, many more aspects can be further rewarding for humankind.
anmolwrites   
Jun 15, 2022
Writing Feedback / Technology has made man dumb [4]

@Holt
I think there is some misunderstanding here, this is not an IELTS essay! It is an ACCUPLACER essay with word limit between 400 to 600. It is for a university entrance exam.
anmolwrites   
Jul 2, 2022
Writing Feedback / Travel by air have a lot of negative effects to the environment. Should it be restricted? [3]

Just a reminder I'm a student, not a professional teacher or instructor.

First of all, the word "air transports" does not seem correct. Instead use AIR TRANSPORTATION or AIR TRAVEL. Secondly, the sentence structures are weird. You can try rephrasing some of the sentences like "it has changed the way how people are travelling in the world".

I think one of the tips for better sentences is reading English books especially literature!
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