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Posts by ductam06
Name: DoDucTam
Joined: Oct 14, 2023
Last Post: Dec 5, 2023
Threads: 3
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From: Viet Nam
School: FPT

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ductam06   
Nov 13, 2023
Writing Feedback / What are the causes of criminals committing more crimes upon being released from prison and solution [2]

Numerous criminals continue to commit crimes after they are released from prisons. The causes of this are lack of monitoring and education, while the two possible solutions that can be implemented are paying more attention to the criminal released from prison and providing classes for them.

One of the primary reasons for this occurrence is the absence of being watched. When they are in prison, their daily life is monitored all the time, so they can only restraint themselves from doing bad things that they love to do. Thus, upon being released, with no one watching and controlling them, they can finally do the illegal activities which they have restrained themselves from doing it while being in jail. Another factor contributing to the situation is their lack of education. Many criminals are born in poor families or even abandoned by their parents, making them have less learning opportunities. Because of this, they have no choice but to do immoral actions like stealing or kidnapping in order to make a living.

In order to solve this, the government can address this issue by restricting the criminals who get released and paying more attention to them. Upon being out of prison, these people should only be allowed to move in a certain area like their home, their neighbor or their city, which is extremely helpful for the authorities in spying their action. If they decide to commit crime once again, the police can effectively and immediately take them away when to avoid damages. Beside that, the government can try to open some classes providing basic skills for these people. Crimes tend to happen as people have no knowledge in making money by themselves, thus, they need to steal or do other bad things to make a living for themselves. Therefore, classes about skills like cooking, sewing and so on can be of a great help for these criminals, if this is possible, these methods will allow them to do business legally.

Overall, the causes for this problem are the lack of being looked and their missing of learning, and the two solutions which can be used are watching the actions of the prisoners when they are out of prison and opening courses that give them basic skills needed in making legal money.
ductam06   
Nov 29, 2023
Undergraduate / Quitting Basketball - Common App Essay [3]

I've met many new amazing, interesting, and beautiful people who I will remember for the rest of my life, all during this past year

If it is in the context of the past then u should have written "i met", not i've met
ductam06   
Nov 29, 2023
Writing Feedback / Ielts: is using technology a bad trend ? [2]

In today's world, numerous people can choose to work at home, and more children are studying from home as technology is now much cheaper and is easier to gain access to. This is a positive development because technology increases working efficiency of adults, and it also makes education for children more convenient.

One of the benefits that technology brings is more efficiency. With the appearance of technology, people can choose to work at home using various platforms, which means that they do not need to spend time to get to their company to work, instead, they can use this amount of time to work more, increasing their efficiency. Addtitionally, if there is a need for a meeting to discuss business but people are extremely far away from each other, numerous applications smartphones or computers can be used to connect with one another, meaning that the working efficiency is not affected by distance anymore. Furthermore, people are usually motivated to work harder in an environment they are comfortable with, in this case, it is their home. For instance, an experiment conducted at the USA found out that the efficiency of people working at home are generally higher than those who work at companies by atleast 25%.

Another pros of using technology is that teaching children become more convenient. When there are some students cannot go to school directly because of some personal reasons, teachers can just use technology to teach them online, which will save them a lot of time and energy. Moreover, if students accidentally miss class, lessons can be recording through technology before they are sent to these students so that teachers do not have to teach these lessons again. For instance, a study in the UK showed that the workload of teachers reduced massively as they did not need to use their personal time to teach children who missed the class. Asides from that, children can ask their teachers through technology whenever they have some problems with studying, which is less time-consuming than using a lot of time to school and finding their teacher for some questions.

In conclusion, this is a positive trend as technology makes working more efficiently and teaching more advantageous.
ductam06   
Dec 5, 2023
Scholarship / GKS - Study plan. One year of Korean language course [5]

I Joined study groups and hired a personal tutor online to practice the language.
I listen podcast about korea in Korean and there are some useful channel speaking korean in a beginning level


if it is a plan then u should use future tense, not past like Joined, or at least of u have done one of your task then u should use present perfect: i have ..., further more, it is i will listen to podcast about ..., not i listen podcast about korea.
ductam06   
Dec 5, 2023
Writing Feedback / ielt p2: causes why people like online meeting than meeting directly and solution for it [2]

It is said the numerous teenagers nowadays like socialising by technology than meeting others face-to-face. The reasons for this occurrence is that meeting online is more convenient and more comfortable, and possible solutions to solve this predicament is through parents' care and building better places for meeting.

One of the primary causes for this situation is the convenience of meeting online. By using technology to communicate, people can talk to each other whenever they need to, meaning that the need for direct conversation is limited. Furthermore, people's communication are possible even if they are far away from each other with online meeting, so it also contributes to the fall of meeting in person. Another reason for this is that the people are more comfortable with online meeting. Due to the impact of technology, people in these days are more used to meeting one another through phones and other devices, thus, they feel more uncomfortable towards meeting others directly. For example, a survey in the USA have shown that atleast 38% people of their country prefer meeting online than meeting each other.

One possible solution to dispatch this occurrence is parents' interacion. If parents decide to communicate further with their children regarding direct meet, they can give some encouragement or advice to their children to meet effectively. This may boost their confidence and motivate them to meet others in person. Asides from that, the government can also tackle this issue by constructing more places suitable for meeting. Many people want to meet online because a lot of their meets are affected by conditions like bad weather, noises, etc, so the government can build more places less influenced by this to encourage other people. For instance, in the UK, it is said in the report that the existence of such places have increased the number of people meeting directly by 20%.

Overall, meeting online is more popular as it is more advantageous and more familiar, and two solutions for this are parents' support and building more areas suitable for meeting.
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