himca
Jan 12, 2024
Letters / Motivation Letter for Master's Degree in Management of Technology at TU Delft [3]
Hi DandyFabian, offering my two cents on your essay:
1. One part that I find unique from your essay is how you mention how a specific course piqued your interest from the MSc program. I love the idea of mentioning a specific interest on your chosen specialization, but I think you need to elaborate more on your reasoning and real world applications of that course to make it more coherent and convincing for readers.
2. I have to agree with the consultant that the start of your essay, albeit being relevant to the MSc degree itself, holds too much focus on describing your educational background, which will be presented in your resume anyway.
3. You mentioned that you aim to be a well-rounded professional capable of navigating dynamic and competitive environments, but I don't understand how the program itself would help you to achieve this goal. I suggest you to define each goals and explore on how the program could help you to be "well-rounded" and able to "navigate dynamic and competitive environments"
3. I noticed a typo in "With this elective in mind, I intend to have my rhesis supervised by Dr. G. (Geerten) van de Kaa", suggesting to have another proof read just to be sure.
All in all, loving the essay. Good luck on your application!
Hi DandyFabian, offering my two cents on your essay:
1. One part that I find unique from your essay is how you mention how a specific course piqued your interest from the MSc program. I love the idea of mentioning a specific interest on your chosen specialization, but I think you need to elaborate more on your reasoning and real world applications of that course to make it more coherent and convincing for readers.
2. I have to agree with the consultant that the start of your essay, albeit being relevant to the MSc degree itself, holds too much focus on describing your educational background, which will be presented in your resume anyway.
3. You mentioned that you aim to be a well-rounded professional capable of navigating dynamic and competitive environments, but I don't understand how the program itself would help you to achieve this goal. I suggest you to define each goals and explore on how the program could help you to be "well-rounded" and able to "navigate dynamic and competitive environments"
3. I noticed a typo in "With this elective in mind, I intend to have my rhesis supervised by Dr. G. (Geerten) van de Kaa", suggesting to have another proof read just to be sure.
All in all, loving the essay. Good luck on your application!