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lissc6   
Nov 25, 2009
Undergraduate / UC Prompt 2: Music [3]

Prompt: Tell us about a personal quality, talent, accomplishment, contribution, or experience that is important to you. What about this quality or accomplishment makes you proud and how does it relate to the person you are?When I opened my eyes I was stunned to look down and see something strange in my hands. It was black, long, and had many holes. Beautiful sounds would come out when air was blown into it. But for those sounds to come out it would take challenge, dedication, and practice. In my daily life it was not so easy when I had many other obligations. It was not until one day that the strange thing, "my clarinet" shifted my life and taught me a valuable life lesson on never giving up.

When I was in third grade I remember playing a simpler version of the clarinet called a recorder. Everyday my teacher would teach us how to play. Kids with enthusiasm played their recorder even if their music was not right. As for myself, I would cry because it would not come out correct. I could not wait till class was over. My parents always told me that "practice makes perfect" and if I wanted to play wonderfully I was going to have practice because it was not easy to pick up something and do it perfect right away. I never understood this advice and was relived when the school year was over and I would not have to play anymore. From that point on I thought music was just out my mind that it was not for me.

It is true when people state, "When you don't like something it always comes back" as when music came back again in seventh grade. The class I stepped into was beginning band. It was not a dream; it was reality I had to face once again, which made me nervous. My teacher showed us many instruments to see which one we wanted to play. I decided to pick the clarinet since it looked fun and not too hard. I was afraid though to play, I did not want any bad things happening to me. I was shocked though when in little time I not only began to like to play, I became a good player. I loved playing so much I became second chair, and before I knew it, I was playing for two years already.

When I enrolled in ninth grade I was not able to get into a band class, which made me sad and mad but there was nothing I could do. A year passed and I never opened my clarinet box nor bothered playing. In tenth grade when I joined band once again, to my surprise I had lost most of my skills. I was frustrated when I could not play my high notes. I knew I was stuck and had to deal with the class for a year. When we had to play the "First Suite in Eb" I was terrified because it seemed like it was too hard. I could not get the music; little by little I lost the passion to play my clarinet. This not only affected my music class but the rest of my classes because I was so discouraged and upset over losing my clarinet skills. When something looked difficult I would not even bother trying it because I thought failure was evitable.

One day, my music teacher told me I had potential for playing and could not just give up like that. This conversation deeply inspired me; it brought tears from my heart. My problem I figured out was that I never took dedication seriously or the step for a challenge to relearn my skills. I decided to accept the challenge to practice everyday to become a good clarinet player. Today I don't consider myself the best player but I know that continuing playing the clarinet has brought me much joy. I learned that to have a successful life I must have the dedication to take a challenge when it is presented to me so that I can prosper. Everything is not easy in this world, and I cannot give up without trying. This lesson I learned while playing my clarinet can be adapted to all areas of my life. Never give up without trying, and try and try and try until you can succeed.
lissc6   
Nov 25, 2009
Undergraduate / "Tears of Life" - UC Essay #2 [8]

just one thing:
"that I had had the humility to first accept myself as I was"
I beleive you didnt mention this in the beginnig so I would recommend that you either explain a little bit more or just take it out.

Overall your essay is really good keep it up!!
lissc6   
Nov 30, 2009
Undergraduate / Uc Prompt 1: My Family, "we are the decent and honest people" [4]

Prompt #1

Describe the world you come from - for example, your family, community or school - and tell us how your world has shaped your dreams and aspirations. *


Its 5:45 a.m. I overheard a man telling a woman," give them two dollars each for school." Before you know it, a woman says "its 6:15 its time to get ready for school." Nobody listens but a girl, she comes to me and says, "hurry up I don't want to be late for school look the little one wakes up and you don't." This is a typical weekday of my life. This people define the world I come from my family. My dreams and aspirations are met thanks to them.

An education has been a primary matter in my family and believes that we need an education beyond high school to have a better life. My little sister is not aware of this but she knows she has to go to school. For my other sister a year younger than me, believes school is hard but I tell her she could overcome it if she tries hard enough. As for myself I believe in having an education, I know is not easy getting there. But I know I can do it. "There is always a proposal we came up with and that is, "The condensed path that you struggle to get in through but succeed in life or the wide path that everyone walks through but takes you no where." This helps me to know that in order for my dreams to get accomplished it's not going to be easy to walk through but its possible if I have my family next to me.

In my world we don't have everything we want, we may not be the richest or good-looking people but we are the decent and honest people. Before asking anybody else for help we ask each other first. Thus makes my family a united world that has influenced me to give me the best direction for life. There's never Perfection, you always have to face obstacles knowing this my dreams wont be fulfilled the first time but knowing my world wont let me down satisfies me the most.
lissc6   
Nov 30, 2009
Undergraduate / 'fury and frustration' - UC Transfer Prompt 1- Experiences in Art [3]

I remember running to my mother the one time I was able to successfully draw the face of cartoon,I remember running to my mother the one time I was able to successfully draw the face of cartoon,

You should re-read this sentence again

the [College] and [College] colleges
I continue to expand my knowledge of and experience art history through classes taken taken at colleges or if you just went to one its: taken at a college
lissc6   
Nov 30, 2009
Undergraduate / Planting a Win-win Attitude--UC Prompt #2 personal statement [3]

Seeing as I already had a clear idea of my objective as a coach, I began soon the following Monday.
rewrite this sentence because it does not make sense

overall its great but talk more of how this experience relates to you now??
lissc6   
Nov 30, 2009
Undergraduate / UC prompt #1 and 2, healthcare field-feedback. [3]

I took up a job at my family's business
Every weekend I wakewoke up
who worked
mid-day
Most of it was interesting and entertaining
Most of my summer was
by the way what was the prompt??

prompt 2 was great!!

it would be nice if you could revise my prompt thanks
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