Undergraduate / 'Catch. Pass. Catch' - Common Application Short Answer- Lacrosse [4]

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Prompt: In the space provided below, please elaborate on one of your activities (extracurricular, personal activities, or work experience)(150 words or fewer).

"Whewwwww!" At the sound of the whistle the ball is flung in the air. Catch. Pass. Catch. My heart is pumping, and adrenaline racing full speed. My opponent is on the move, and coming in my direction. As she approaches I can see her in plain view. Her eyes are glaring with the same intensity that is burning within my body. We are both seeking the same goal: to pocket a win. "Got ball," I yell. A quick two-step and I am now defending her. Is she going to pass me? "Got help". Not a chance. To my rescue appears my teammate for a double-team. I check the ball. Scoop. Pass. Catch. We recover, and down the field we go, one-step closer to a victory. Lacrosse has not only enhanced my understanding of unity, but it has taught me what it takes to succeed. I have learned to develop mental toughness and ban self-limiting thoughts. No matter how cold it is, or how tough the is going, it will eventually end. This has cemented the 'pain is temporary while glory lasts forever' mindset into my psyche.

Undergraduate / NYU Supplement Shorts Answers- Summer Vacation, Famous New Yorker, Movie [5]

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In addition to any work experience that you listed on your application, please tell us how you spent your most recent summer vacation.

I obtained my first taste of college life staying at Emory University for a two-week program called ACAP (Accounting Career Awareness Program). Throughout my time there, I explored business career options, visited top accounting firms, attended classes and seminars, and finally came to the conclusion the business world was not for me. After an enlightening experience at Emory, I traveled to Europe with my family and immersed myself in diverse, foreign cultures.

If you had the opportunity to spend one day in New York City with a famous New Yorker, who would it be and what would you do?

Successful, smart, and an undeniable fashionista, Sex and the City's Carrie Bradshaw is someone who I would love to spend a day in the Big Apple with. Strutting down the city streets, we would shop at all of Manhattan's finest stores. After and exhausting day of perusing Manolo Blahnik and Jimmy Choos', we would dine at a quirky café with the rest of the Sex and the City clan. Carrie's words of wisdom and Miranda's outrageous outbursts would make for great conversation and a day to remember.

In the year 2050, a movie is being made of your life. Please tell us the name of your movie and briefly summarize the story line.

At age 40, Erica appears to have it all: a successful career as a renowned doctor, and loving family and friends. However, an unexpected call sends her to a remote village in Ghana where a deadly outbreak has occurred. As she battles against the corrupt government and militia to save innocent lives, she begins to have second thoughts. She flashes back to her pass and questions her priorities. Will Erica's compassion for the poor pull her through or will she return home to her safe haven?

Please tell us what led you to select your anticipated academic program and/or NYU school/college, and what interests you most about your intended discipline.

Science has always intrigued me. From the years of playing doctor with my little brother, watching ER and live surgeries on TLC, and winning multiple science fair awards. Since I was a child, I have applied logic. Logic directly correlates with science where I found my passion. Majoring in Biology will be the necessary stepping stone to accomplish my life-long dream of becoming a physician. NYU College of Arts and Science would more than prepare me for my journey that lies ahead.