Undergraduate / Stanford Essay - Intellectually Challenging Experience [3]

I have to say.. that was really interesting!
When you think intellectually challenging you rarely think of a salon lol.
and I LOVED the twist at the end.
In my opinion, you don't need to change a thing :)

Undergraduate / GRANDMOMMY UPENN ESSAY - one day you would share the same dreams that I had [24]

"What happened?" I screamed, rushing into the room to see what had happened . occured

besides that... i love it :)

Undergraduate / Emotional, multicultural, and optimist - My BU Essay [5]

I think you should talk more about the puerto rican culture! give some examples! I know there are a lot. I just think the more specific you are, the more they'll remember your essay.

Good luck! (:

Undergraduate / GRANDMOMMY UPENN ESSAY - one day you would share the same dreams that I had [24]

thank you for your help too! Good luck!!!

Undergraduate / "playing the piano" - COMMON APP ESSAY: Elaborate on one of your activities [5]

Are you keeping the comment at the end? (check my awards section)
I don't think that's necessary. They want to read something that's not about the awards but about how you enjoy a specific activity.

Also, if this is your essay, I find it a bit short.
a LOT of people choose to write about the piano. Make your essay more special.
I think it has potential though :)