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Posts by vincenthessel
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Last Post: May 19, 2010
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vincenthessel   
May 10, 2010
Poetry / ESL art poem - Mona Lisa [9]

hi i need to write a poem for ESL of how the picture made me feel. i choose mona lisa.

I am in the woods and saw it in the woods
is that a rabbit or a basketball?

Rabbits hop and
B-balls bounce and
once I had a rabbit that resembles Shaq

its moving in the bush
and it is orange
so probably a rabbit but maybe a basketball

what does it sound like?
What do I feel like?
Is she a man or a woman or a basketball?

There is an ancient french poetry creature
it is called
haicouxIt is about the basketball:

Boing Boing Dribble Jump
Omellette au Fromage et Baguette
The ears don't go in the hoop

But why is she looking like that?
Is she looking
if it is a rabbit or a basketball?


thanks you i just want to know whats wrong and how to make it better thx again bye

edit- oh no this should be in poetry but now i cant move it sorry sorry sorry!
vincenthessel   
May 12, 2010
Poetry / ESL art poem - Mona Lisa [9]

thank you

i wrote "is she a man or a woman or a basketball" because maybe then will the reader guess, that mona lisa is a basketball. is mona a she or it?

thanks again this helps
vincenthessel   
May 19, 2010
Poetry / ESL art poem - Mona Lisa [9]

Hi guys my teacher gave me a D because there isn't the basketball or rabbit in the painting but thanks for helping anyway. I made the corrections but maybe i'm just not a good poet. thanks again.
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