Undergraduate / UCF Admission Essay...[What qualities do I possess...] [14]

I think you have a really good start but i think you should narrow it to a very specific example of you determination and unique

Undergraduate / International University of Art and Design, trying to apply [7]

yeah i definitly think you need tomake it shorter colleges don'tlike to see you go over the limit

Writing Feedback / 'You didn't build that?' - Luck has nothing to do w/ success [7]

I disagre becaus people can work hard and test their limits yet they still fail. Then we have people that do absolutely nothing and succeed. I think peopl succeed when it i their time to and their time might come from either working hard or being a lucky person.

Graduate / It's a world that we have designed to suit our needs; SoP for M.Sc. product design [6]

I think this essay is very well written and coherent. I would suggest a better transition for paragraph two to three, I feel like something is missing before you start paragraph three.

Undergraduate / International Dentist needs to write essay to go to nursing school [4]

I think,if you have a choice, you should answer the second prompt. It gives you a better oppirtunity to showoffyour abilities. in the second prompt i would focus on on area that they gave you for example altruism. i think if you try and explain more than one value your essay will be unfocused and it could come off as pompess instead of confident. posibly talk about how you have developed values in the past and the similarities the school has with your past development of values. i would continue on to talk about what it is about the school that makes you beleive it has those values that can help you and that attract you to the school. i think the focus of your essay should be the values the school can help you develop.