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dtth   
Oct 1, 2010
Writing Feedback / Compulsory education for children between the ages of 5 and 15 [6]

Nowadays, everyone knows how important education is. The obvious evidence is the decreasing rate of illiteracy, almost people are able to read and write clearly. Education can decide the future of any country in the world. So, governments throughout the world should make education compulsory for all children between the ages of 5 and 15 for some reasons.

First of all, it is the development of the children between 5 and 15 years old. According to researchers, a child at these ages develops the most strongly. His brain haven't formed any "trails of thinking" yet; thus, he can acquire new things very fast. We can verify it through a simple experiment. We only need to give a 6 year-old child and a 40 year-old adult some random numbers, then they have to read again without seeing . What's about the reason? The child do this work much better in most of times of repeating.

Or, if a person learn foreign language when he was little, it will take less time for him to use that language proficiently.
Secondly, as we know, children who are educated carefully may devote more to both their countries and the world. When they finish secondary school ( at 15 years old ), they have systems of fundamental knowledge about science, society,...which is necessary for anyone. With that base, children can continue studying at universities or take part in short courses of any jobs. In fact, it is not a small amount of children choosing the second way. They will be some of manpower source in their countries. For children who continue learning, they have more choices to contribute to the development by being businessmans, scientists, engineers,... In contrast, the children aren't educated, they can't do anything!

Finally, education affects strongly to every country. A country can't certainly exist long without intellectuals. Besides the weakness in internal force, it is not attractive foreigners to come and invest. In addition, education helps to prevent social evils which are more dangerous than invaders, such as : HIV/AIDS, gambling,...From 5 to 15 years old, children often imitate adults. As the information we read on newspaper today, it is not difficult to find that addicts are mainly children and minors. So, education children is very important because it repels bad things, conduces building healthy way of living.

In generally, education is vital to any societies in today's world. There must have reasonable campaigns for education, especially for children between the ages of 5 and 15 - future of each country!
dtth   
Oct 1, 2010
Writing Feedback / Compulsory education for children between the ages of 5 and 15 [6]

Would you like to consider the difficulties of implementing such policies in your essay or why is it that these are not done in some countries?

yes, why not? Can you send me some things such as links or file tell about those difficulties?
Thank you so much!
dtth   
Oct 3, 2010
Writing Feedback / Toefl essay : The most important leader in your country. [5]

Hi Wupi,
I think your essay is good. I'm very happy because I've already known about a perfect King of Thailand. A King can help residents with their problems, especially farmers.

I agree with the correction above, and agree with you that it is impossible to write about him in the paper. But I think, you should add some opinion of yours in the conclusion to attract reader more

assists directly to the farmers that faced
dtth   
Oct 3, 2010
Writing Feedback / Is the dependence on computers a good thing? [4]

Computers are great inventions of humankind. They have many important applications in our lives. We use them in businesses, hospitals, crime detection or even to fly planes. They have been more and more modern due to the development of sciences, especially Physics and Mathematics. Is it good if we are increasingly abusing the computers?

It is easy to find that computers make us lazier. In some places which have developed economy, people use computers all the time on work. They do not have to move when they want to send documents or assignments; all they need to do is start the computer, sign in their account on Internet and send. What a simple and convenient way! But it will makes them tired if they must walk on a long way. Moreover, many people calculate, sketch graphs with the help of computers that they do not know how to do simple things themselves and do not want to do anything without computers.

Besides, overusing computers can cause some diseases. They decrease eyesight. Physicist show that when electron strike the screen, there exists X-ray which damage cells in eyes gradually. Thus, spending much time in front of the computers will make us short-sighted. Furthermore, microwaves from the computers can lead users to mutations which are 99% bad or other diseases which are not good for their health. The risk will be lessened if users take a short rest while using computers, but they are not prevented completely.

In the future, computers will be improved more to serve many different purposes of human. People will continue to use in communication, studying, finding information, entertaining, etc, and use new functions of future computers. Perhaps, by using computers, we will know about partners' emotion in the conservations. Scientist will be able to create a kind of computers which can express every feelings of people. Schoroeder, editor of ML standard said: "Rather than having "no" button some touch screen, I need to shake my head".

In conclusion, it is good if we try to improve computers day by day, but we should limit dependence on them. They help us in saving time as well as they could make us become inanimate. Abusing them will lead our world to be undeveloped instead of strong development as we expect.
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